Another Autumn - Mountain Farm, 1890
With protective shoulders, stained complexion
Humpback Mountain sweetly chirps, trills, rustles, and woos;
Serenade so tranquil, I forget
she's also
a tempest possessed
of blustering, tumultuous song. I listen
as sun-drenched basil waltzes, balmy breeze conducts.
Observe stoic thyme
still standing
sentimental over yesteryear
faintly blooming tints of simplicity.
Sacrificial herbs hanging upside down dying,
drying in upper loft, children's beds,
clapboard walls
thin split shingles squint,
almost glare as I, judge and jury, heavily
question slits of sky blue, beautiful today, but
bold January
isn't known
as a gracious, understanding host.
Hand hewn, these old logs still standing, recall
voices raised in melodies I cannot quite hear.
hands of tobacco, wool, apples, milk,
eggs, walnuts
chestnuts, clucking hens,
razorback pigs. Minds of great ingenuity,
of necessity. And I try hard to listen
while grey squirrel wastes
little time
pondering a mountain people's past.
by Margaret Bednar, October 27, 2014
This is for "Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Play it Again, Toads". I chose to give a slight nod to Dylan Thomas. HERE.
I used the structure of "Poem in October" - paid close attention to his line count, but I do not even suggest I come close to his AWESOME inventiveness with image and emotion. I also HAD to punctuate and just couldn't begin every line with a capital letter. I'm sure it has to do with being unable to "flow" as beautifully as Dylan Thomas - for that is what his poetry seems to me - to just flow. Do yourself a favor and google him if you have never read him.
Humpback Rocks Mountain Farm is a preserved part of Virginia's history along the Blue Ridge Parkway (Appalachian Mountains).
19 comments:
What a beautiful poem...so full of sights, sounds, emotions. You have done well with Dylan Thomas's style of writing.
The imagery of the past - there is so much I like here.. The inclusion of the list and the mention of January's harshness is something different...
This was my favourite photo and you have brought it to life with your words. Such a wonderful sharing of your experiences.
This brims with beauty, Margaret and you've taken on the Dyllan tone expertly...I love this,
" Observe stoic thyme
still standing
sentimental over yesteryear"
Thank you for the challenges!
this felt almost like a history lesson.
very enjoyable imagery and detail!
I believe you Dylan Thomas-ed the remains of this old farm very well, but I am most taken with the mountain itself in its polarity. The opening of this poem is masterful.
The photo and poem evoke a whole other world with all its compelling details.
There's a gentle haunting to this, the comfort of deeply-composted habitation. How carefully and sweetly you draw it all out, right down to that squirrel's knowing eye.
Don't underestimate the Thomasesque nature of your poem. It flows beautifully, walks us with you through the wondrous space, is filled with sensory imagery. Well done!
Great write Marge! Wonderful Dylan take you've done.I like Dylan's style but could not emulate near enough. Perhaps to do just as you did to follow his word count line by line (borrowed your lovely pics in posting below, thanks!)
http://imagery77.blogspot.com/2014/10/a-homecoming.html
Hank
Talking of simplicity...how often we pass it in our speedy life. ~ Great connection with past in the poem, and the message "Listen". Thanks for prompts! x
A sensual feast, Margaret.
Bravo, Margaret! This is beautiful~
I love your photos!
:)
i can't seem to get myself to capitalize or punctuate with any regularity. nice to read you too, Margaret, and thanks for your kind words... ~
I love the idea of Basil waltzes and stalwart thyme, Margaret. Thanks, and thanks for that in-the-moment squirrel! k.
As Astrid would say, "You have come from far," Margaret. I'm actually quite amazed by how you have stuck at your poetry over the years and have become a veritable poet amongst us! CONGRATULATIONS! Dylan Thomas would be proud of you.
I love this scene. So many details and images. It's amazing how much history can be be learned by simply observing a place like this. I also really like the lines
"bold January
isn't known
as a gracious, understanding host"
That is a great way of stating it.
Margaret your words flow as serenade themselves in this poem of "Another Autumn," how lovely.
A very good poem to remind us all that consonance and euphony are indeed necessary elements of great poetry. I very much enjoy reading this one aloud and then to listen to the cascade of sounds.
The picture is fantastic. And your words makes me want to close my eyes and let myself be transported to that bit of autumn. Wonderful.
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