The Offering
A touch of Japanese culture offered
upon bed of fluffy white, pink meat served raw,
pleasing to the eye, the tongue.
Upon a sweet mattress of silk,
freshly dressed in nature's best,
arched and waiting for your touch...
If I were the delicacy, would you attempt a taste?
Margaret Bednar, Art Happens 365, January 23, 2012
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This is for "Magpie Tales #101". Hop on over and enjoy amazing poetry to the above photo prompt! The original photo prompt was
Also linked this with Imaginary Garden with Real Toads "Open Link Monday"
This provocative photo almost did me in! I had no idea what to write until I stumbled upon a fun new poetry form called "Sevenling". Grace of "Everyday Amazing" introduced it to me. It is a form of seven lines, first three should be an element of three, second set of three should be another element of three, connected directly or indirectly, or not at all. The seventh line should act as a narrative summary or punchline. Click on over via the link to get a more in-depth description.
24 comments:
Oh this is excellent - you saw right into the image, and your interpretation is spot on! I, too, discovered the sevenling this weekend, thanks to Marian of runaway sentence, and find it a most intriguing form.
Great job with what must be a difficult form ...
What an interesting form. I love the challenge of writing in form. I love this interpretation of the image.
"Pink meat served raw." Yeah...exactly. It evokes no pleasant thoughts in my mind.
You saw right through that image. The photo at the bottom makes it absolutely clear what it means. I knew the prompt bothered me, now I know why, in plain terms. Leave it to a photographer to see betta.
OH, I didnt have a clue what the photo was meant to suggest, till I saw your bottom photo. Now it all comes clear. Great write!
You went the opposite from me-I thought about it and said-"Nope not in the mood"...I like your directness at the end.
smiles...i do enjoy sushi...and if they do not see you as a delicacy should you even offer?
Nature's best, indeed...nice write...
It's a lovely form, Margaret. I'm not sure which form I'm talking about . . . but your last line will linger in the mind.
Fireblossom and Sherry - I don't know what the artist had in mind, but this is my take on it :)
Brian - AWESOME point!
Dr. FTSE - You keep me laughing - that's the form I like :)
Bet you get lots of nibbles?
So very vivid, just like the photograph. I'm impressed with your response to the prompt!
Delectable, perfect work. Stunning exit line.
What a great use of the prompt! I just couldn't come up with anything for this. You did this brilliantly!
Interesting form, and the content is quite tasty. Your last line is just right. The sushi pic is amazing too, great idea including that!
Did you see "Sex & The City II" ? Your piece totally brought to mind the scene where Samantha is covered, albeit naked, with sushi. Sacrilege! And apologies! But I did get a good laugh, and that is worth an awful lot!
The ending makes one think.
amazing take on the prompt.
Intriguing photo, lovely write...
Lovely double entendres! AND I learned what sushi really is.
Superbly done, Margaret! The seven-line form was perfect. It even looks like sushi with the three lines of meat, three lines of rice, and the final line as the ribbon of seaweed that ties it all together.
Ooh, I like your take on this. The format is perfect, and accompanying sushi image just adds such an interesting little exclamation point to the piece! Nicely done!!
Delectably done!
Deliciously beautiful Margaret!!
Such a treat in selection of these tasty morsels! Written wonderfully!
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