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| Summer Evening Edward Hopper , 1947 |
The Date
The languid air
contrasted sharply
with my senses
as the glide of his hand
and touch of his knee
finally made me feel
sixteen.
"Sweetness."
That's what he called me.
Wrapped in a cocoon
of darkness, his urgent whispers
charmed even the stars;
they too dipped and swayed
in rhythm with his
velvety smooth baritone.
His brightly colored hair
beckoned my fingers
like a moth to a flame.
Oh, how my lips did burn!
The stars spun
and time stood still...
Almost.
Enlightenment did come
by way of the porch light,
flooding us with accusations.
Without a backward glance,
the steps he did hurtle
and I watched him fade
into darkness with
mixed emotions.
The curtained window
drew back together. I
entered through the back door.
Unable to look at her.
At my sister.
His supposed date.
by Margaret Bednar, Art Happens 365, August 8, 2011
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This is for Magpie Tales #77. Please click and enjoy many other takes on this photo prompt.
Also posting this to the wonderful poetry blog: dVerse - "Open Link Night" The talent is outstanding and if you want a fun night of poetry reading, please click on the link.
Also posting this to the wonderful poetry blog: dVerse - "Open Link Night" The talent is outstanding and if you want a fun night of poetry reading, please click on the link.
23 comments:
Thanks for the link Margaret
have a nice new week
greatings
Matteo
Oh wow - well written! That twist surprised me! Beautifully portrayed (and betrayed?)
The twist surprised me, too, Margaret. I suddenly wondered if this was autobiographical? :)
Oh, ouch!
Well done.
oh, this is really really GOOD!!!
woop, nice twist at the end...oh there will be a cat fight tonight i am sure...haha...i was all caught up in the kiss and being taken away by it, you got me.
Very cool twist!
Uh oh .... great words!
Margaret...
Amazing you are!!
This is not autobiographical... At 16, I was kissing horses, not boys ;). Thanks everyone, for you kind comments.
these are great words and love this shot it has always been one of my favourites
Talk about an unexpected twist! Love it.
Thanks, Justine & Dom! I really let my imagination take a wild turn here ... :)
There had to be something other than 'happily ever after' beyond that "almost". There's something disquieting about that painting, beautiful as it is.
Wonderful little twist at the end, definitely be an interesting after conversation..haha
What a surprise ending...great story you told using Hopper...one of my favorite artists.
uh oh! Regardless, I love this stanza - they too dipped and swayed
in rhythm with his
velvety smooth baritone.
..i like the twist you made at the end – unexpectedly… thanks for the read.. i enjoyed it!
Yes. Clever conclusion. It's usually "Dad" switches on the porch light.
yikes! what a way to end an evening...in more ways than one. you delivered a delightful and head-spinning starlit scene with quite a twist...absolutely lovely
Wow...I wasn't expecting the ending. Nice write, M!
OUCH! For sure!
Sibling rivalry times a million!
Oooo...nasty! I like it!
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