Friday, January 30, 2015

"Supplication"


Supplication

Beneath lavender clouds
I walk fields of scented rows;
morning's first blush saturated with
devotion -

and with lips hesitantly shy,
I reacquaint and caress verse
pocketed long ago; childhood's seeds
taking root.

by Margaret Bednar, January 30, 2015


This is linked with "Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Transforming Thursday - Lavender Fields" and "dVerse - Meeting the Bar  - The Cinquain expanded"  dVerse asked us to add a syllable to the traditional cinquain format - so the count is 3-5-7-9-3.


Nature - especially sunrise and sunset - moves me, as I'm sure it does most people.  As for my poem, I think this is many a parent's wish - that children, if they stray from their faith, will one day find a way back to what was instilled in them at a young age. 

30 comments:

Susan said...

You take this there, as if lavender was for remembrance and presence together.

Björn Rudberg said...

Those lavender clouds.. I love when you have those.. A lovely sensual poem fitting both prompts.. Kudos.

debispoems said...

I'm kind of holding on to that thought for myself. Wonderful,Margaret

Karen S. said...

I'm hooked on lavender now! Lovely post.

Rytha Ephua said...

I bet you, I love this piece. Nice art work.

rumoursofrhyme said...

Lovely writing, Margaret ... and an expression of every parent's fondest wish.

Tony

Mary said...

I love the similarities as well as the contrasts in both stanzas.....together they are a beautiful 'whole.'

Gabriella said...

I always enjoy what you show us of the nature around you. I can also understand your fears and hopes concerning your children's faith.

dkirkstokes said...

Simply beautiful.

Brian Miller said...

love the spiritual side of this...when hiking once I came onto a field of lavender...wow it intoxicating how powerful the scent was as I walked through...

Anthony Desmond said...

very spiritual, a meditation in a way... The scent of lavender is one of my favorites: it's strong, yet has softness and not harsh...

bwfiction said...

when I read these, I think of "innocent and pure" - well penned

Sherry Blue Sky said...

So lovely. These scents take me back to childhood, too.

Jazzbumpa said...

beautifully constructed and
a pleasure to read

cheers
jzb

Mama Zen said...

Beautiful. Really beautiful, Margaret.

Kim Nelson said...

Your last line took me in a different direction. I like that.

quest4peas said...

"verse pocketed long ago" - there is something about what we are taught as children that will never quite leave us, and sometimes...will help us find our way back home.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Beaitifully said.

kaykuala said...

To prostrate to Providence's strength and protection is always expected of us. Thoughtful take Marge!

Hank

Hannah said...

Yes...this resonates with me...what a beautiful seed to use for this sentiment...the fragrant lavender seed...it can't be forgotten. ♥

Thank you, for joining, Margaret!

Lolamouse said...

This is like a beautiful prayer. Just lovely!

Jim said...

Nice Cinquain pair, Margaret. "Train up the child ..."
Or, "Teach your children well, your father's hell ..." (Crosby, Stills & Nash song [http://www.lyricsfreak.com/c/crosby+stills+nash/teach+your+children_20312731.html]) is one I like even better.
..

Grace said...

I love the expanded cinquains specially the morning filled with devotions and seeds taking root ~

Happy Sunday ~

Kerry O'Connor said...

There is something about lavender which connects us to the past.

Poet Laundry said...

Lovely. I, too, like the faith connection felt in this.

Susie Clevenger said...

A beautiful place of prayer, remembrance.

Marian said...

Pretty, Margaret.

Patricia A. McGoldrick said...

Beautiful sentiment in "children's seeds taking root".

Lydia said...

Margaret! This is truly wonderful! How impressive that you wrote for more than one prompt, thus, I was not thinking of any of them--only your words and the feelings they evoked in me. Special.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Beautiful, just beautiful.
Anna :o]