Supplication
Beneath lavender clouds
I walk fields of scented rows;
morning's first blush saturated with
devotion -
and with lips hesitantly shy,
I reacquaint and caress verse
pocketed long ago; childhood's seeds
taking root.
by Margaret Bednar, January 30, 2015
This is linked with "Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Transforming Thursday - Lavender Fields" and "dVerse - Meeting the Bar - The Cinquain expanded" dVerse asked us to add a syllable to the traditional cinquain format - so the count is 3-5-7-9-3.
Nature - especially sunrise and sunset - moves me, as I'm sure it does most people. As for my poem, I think this is many a parent's wish - that children, if they stray from their faith, will one day find a way back to what was instilled in them at a young age.
30 comments:
You take this there, as if lavender was for remembrance and presence together.
Those lavender clouds.. I love when you have those.. A lovely sensual poem fitting both prompts.. Kudos.
I'm kind of holding on to that thought for myself. Wonderful,Margaret
I'm hooked on lavender now! Lovely post.
I bet you, I love this piece. Nice art work.
Lovely writing, Margaret ... and an expression of every parent's fondest wish.
Tony
I love the similarities as well as the contrasts in both stanzas.....together they are a beautiful 'whole.'
I always enjoy what you show us of the nature around you. I can also understand your fears and hopes concerning your children's faith.
Simply beautiful.
love the spiritual side of this...when hiking once I came onto a field of lavender...wow it intoxicating how powerful the scent was as I walked through...
very spiritual, a meditation in a way... The scent of lavender is one of my favorites: it's strong, yet has softness and not harsh...
when I read these, I think of "innocent and pure" - well penned
So lovely. These scents take me back to childhood, too.
beautifully constructed and
a pleasure to read
cheers
jzb
Beautiful. Really beautiful, Margaret.
Your last line took me in a different direction. I like that.
"verse pocketed long ago" - there is something about what we are taught as children that will never quite leave us, and sometimes...will help us find our way back home.
Beaitifully said.
To prostrate to Providence's strength and protection is always expected of us. Thoughtful take Marge!
Hank
Yes...this resonates with me...what a beautiful seed to use for this sentiment...the fragrant lavender seed...it can't be forgotten. ♥
Thank you, for joining, Margaret!
This is like a beautiful prayer. Just lovely!
Nice Cinquain pair, Margaret. "Train up the child ..."
Or, "Teach your children well, your father's hell ..." (Crosby, Stills & Nash song [http://www.lyricsfreak.com/c/crosby+stills+nash/teach+your+children_20312731.html]) is one I like even better.
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I love the expanded cinquains specially the morning filled with devotions and seeds taking root ~
Happy Sunday ~
There is something about lavender which connects us to the past.
Lovely. I, too, like the faith connection felt in this.
A beautiful place of prayer, remembrance.
Pretty, Margaret.
Beautiful sentiment in "children's seeds taking root".
Margaret! This is truly wonderful! How impressive that you wrote for more than one prompt, thus, I was not thinking of any of them--only your words and the feelings they evoked in me. Special.
Beautiful, just beautiful.
Anna :o]
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