Tuesday, January 27, 2015

"Five"


Five

Dandelion chains and lavender twists;
innocence in braided curls.
Lacy dresses and sugary smiles

capture not a glance

from bedlam boys still sporting
puppy-dog tails and spit-smoothed hair.

by Margaret Bednar, January 27, 2015


Yes, little girls grow up far faster than little boys…

This is for "Imaginary Garden of Real Toads - The Tuesday Platform"  and 'dVerse - Poetics - Excuse Me, There's a Hair in my Poem!"

31 comments:

Brian Miller said...

well, all i got is boys...and they are growing up fast enough...my older (12) is going away on a youth retreat this weekend...first weekend away from home and not just at a friends house...

lynndiane said...

Raising the youngest two of my five" bedlam boys" with "spit-smoothed hair"...enjoyed this poem :)

Anthony Desmond said...

they really do... don't have any kids myself, but someone I was friends with for a little while was 12 when I met her and was SO mature. I was 15 and my jaw dropped when she told me her age... geeze, when I was 12 I was still playin hide n seek..

Glenn Buttkus said...

"thank heaven for little girls, for without them what would little boys do?" sang Maurice Chevalier. Maybe it was my past lives instincts, but even as an adolescent, girls fascinated me; never went through the girls-R-yucky stage. This piece was tight, imaginative, & very effective; rocked the prompt.

Claudia said...

oh i love the spit-smoothed hair.... also like how you weave in the dandelion chains... sigh...they do grow up too quickly

anarmchairperfectionist said...

Yes. So true... I still see boys running around like bandits while the girls have suddenly become prim and proper.

Kathy Reed said...

Spit-smoothed hair is great..the rhythm in this reminds me of 'fair haired maidens'..of another rhyme..

Kate Mia said...

To realize beauty early is often the secret to beauty of success later on.. and no wonder boys fall prey to heart attacks much earlier than girls of beauty..:)

Björn Rudberg said...

Such difference in general between the little boys and little girls.. (or are they imitating men and women)... maybe men should have flowery hair too.. :-)

Grace said...

At that age, the girls and boys look delightfully different, smiles ~ I still recall my little girl wearing dresses, now she is jeans & boy's shirts teen ~

Fireblossom said...

This vividly depicted scene will change soon enough!

Roslyn Ross said...

They do grow up fast. Enjoy. The really hard part comes after about 18 when you can no longer kiss it better or put a bandaid on it.

Mama Zen said...

Lovely, lovely, Margaret!

Kerry O'Connor said...

I see the essence of girlhood in these lines.

liv2write2day said...

This is a delight. Gotta love those little boys, though with their puppy-dog tails. :0)

Anders Woje Ellingsen said...

Those are nice images, you are using. Being green is the thing. :-)

Mary said...

So true little girls grow up quicker than boys. Oh how I wish they did not & took more time to enjoy the things that only childhood can offer.

kanzensakura.com said...

This is sweet and in a good way. The frilly girls and the rowdy boys ignoring. How wonderful to look back at childhood.

quest4peas said...

love the line "innocence in braided curls."

Yvonne Osborne said...

My little boy still hasn't grown up!

Yvonne Osborne said...

My little boy still hasn't grown up!

Kim Nelson said...

Felt the sweetness of childhood and smiled!

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2015/01/27/spectrum/

SaraV said...

Very true. We get to keep the innocence a bit longer with the boys...but once 14 hits, all bets are off... ;-)

Poet Laundry said...

I find this to be delightful!

Gillena Cox said...

Enjoyed your growing up poem; my daughter and son are grown up both in their forties
Thanks for dropping in to read mine

Much love...

Other Mary said...

I really like this, especially you last two lines.

Amrit Sinha said...

Beautiful imagery :D

Optimistic Existentialist said...

Beautiful literary captures of childhood. Well-done.

kaykuala said...

Young boys learn early to take orders and it may even last a lifetime. It bodes well for good relations if done sincerely by the lasses! Great lines Marge!

Hank

Outlawyer said...

You are absolutely right here--And there are many charming phrases--the hair with the spit to keep it in place was especially evocative to me Thanks k . (Manicddaily)

Jim said...

That was fun, Margaret. I think some of the boys don't ever change. Mrs. Jim trained me so that I will know what she looks like on MOST any day.
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