Tuesday, August 28, 2012

Mag #132 & dVerse Open Link Night "This Big Room"

Big Room, 1948, by Andrew Wyeth
This Big Room

I see us
in this big room

of taciturn shadows
ribboned with luminous light.

The appeal of opposites,
co-mingling;

buoyant laughter,
reticent smiles,

bold kisses,
hesitant whispers,

dashing displays,
veiled pleasure,

my lips greedy,
yours tinctured with generosity.

As the tickling of seasons
flaunt change beyond the windowpane,

alternately layering blankets of snow
and flowers upon your grave,

within these parchment colored walls,
time hovers, inert,

and I breath you in
as I stand upon the threshold

of this big room.

by Margaret Bednar, Art Happens 365, August 28, 2012


This is in response to The Mag 132 challenge to write a poem or short vignette using the weekly photo (the image at the top of this post).

I have also linked with dVerse Open Link Night #59.  

21 comments:

TexWisGirl said...

aww. another sad take on this painting.

Victoria said...

Margaret, your descriptions are so "crisp." A touching, poignant poem. So glad you shared at dVerse, too.

Brian Miller said...

i breathe you in....there at the threshold....love that margaret...the descriptors throughout are very nice...and that line really brings in the emotion there at the end...

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

There is a breathless quality to this piece that I love--and it took me to an expected place--lovely work

Teresa said...

This is a beautiful poem. It's so sad, yet there's a comfort to being able to still breathe him in. Nicely done.

SaraV said...

I really enjoyed this poem--the word choices, images and flow of it swept me along, leaving me smiling. Very nice!

Poet Laundry said...

I think this a jewel of a poem. I love how you interpreted the painting--and your last few lines took my breath away.

Berowne said...

Beautiful writing...

izzy said...

My parents house used to do that to me!
well put. I went in a different direction with mine :)

Ginny Brannan said...

A lifetime of memories and emotions seen...felt...'lived'...in that one room. Something we can all understand and relate to. Beautiful capture, Margaret.

Mary said...

Whew, started out being a love poem and then went in a dark direction. An effective write though; and I liked that 'this big room' appeared both at the beginning and the end.

kaykuala said...

Poignantly sad but brought back the memories within easy reach. Nicely written Marge!

Hank

Helen said...

,, 'the appeal of opposites' ~~ so true. I felt the attraction through each line.

Margaret said...

... Thank you. I would like to think of this poem, not so much as dark, but as dealing with a loss. Usually one spouse/partner dies first...

Not that I wrote this poem based on the movie "UP", but now that I think of it, I CRY in the beginning - each time my kids play that movie.

hedgewitch said...

You fill the big room with life, loss, personality and emotion, Margaret. I'm not sure if you included the photo at the bottom to underline the idea of another, bigger room waiting, as well as the void of the one left behind, but that's the way I read it. Liked it very much.

Donna B. said...

This is beautiful! We are on the same path with our interpretations...BRAVO!

Lucy Westenra said...

I do like the alternate layers of flowers and snow.

Jinksy said...

Co-mingling opposites...

That does it for me. :)

Trellissimo said...

Very thoughtful, very good

The Bug said...

Ah - that punch in the gut at the end - the mark of a great poem!

Tess Kincaid said...

I especially like how tickle plays off tinctured...nice...