Sunday, December 2, 2012

The Mag #146, "Smitten"

"Object to be Destroyed" by Man Ray

Smitten

I appear
the consummate player,

never letting on
I'm counting

the seconds, minutes,
hours, since you left,

our tempo still sweet
upon my tongue.

I remain silent, as this
would render me pathetic.

by Margaret Bednar,  12-02-2012

For The Mag #146.

24 comments:

Fireblossom said...

Ha! Get outta my head.

Green Speck said...

It's amazing ... loved the words in this piece !!!

ReBelle said...

Honey, you can't keep time if you DON'T count... ;-)

Arian Tejano said...

Ah, I love this.

Ginny Brannan said...

Aw, to be smitten like this! Lovely words, Margaret.

Mad Kane said...

Beautifully done!

Madeleine Begun Kane

Daydreamertoo said...

Smitten.... such a nice, agnonising word.
Lovely.

Rinkly Rimes said...

You captured the beat of the beat.

Jacqui Binford-Bell said...

Nice rhythm.

Laurie Kolp said...

Aww... how sweet. Reminds me of first loves.

Ginnie said...

Ah yes. The beat of THAT drummer!

Helen said...

LOVE the December header!!

When that 'tempo' goes off beat, pathetic is usually the resulting emotion! (at least for me)

Tess Kincaid said...

Pathetically in love...

Emma Major said...

Keep counting those beats

Lyn said...

You did this so well, the secret yearning, the movement of time..

RMP said...

a very succulent tempo it must be. while silence seems like a just route, I wonder if not speaking up is more pathetic.

you really transformed this image well.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

our tempo still sweet upon my tongue--


I love that line!

Misfit. said...

Oh my goodness!!! I absolutely loved this! That line is indeed a killer. I love your analogy. Thanks!

Anders Woje Ellingsen said...

PATHETIC

Pathetic is
to be in love,
denying this,
the being of.

kaykuala said...

There are some things which we just got to accept, pathetic but true! Nicely Marge!

Hank

Berowne said...

Nice writing, and rather moving...

Doctor FTSE said...

An inventive interpretation of the prompt.

Jinksy said...

I hear the rhythm of life... :)

Brian Miller said...

our tempo still sweet on my tongue...well that is a pretty hot line...smiles...actually i really like this one...just something charming to it...