Friday, July 13, 2012

IGWRT's-Mary's Mixed Bag & Poetry Jam "I Live Within"

I love to daydream in a flower garden.  Where do you like to daydream?
Would you like to hear this poem read to you by my son?

Check this out on Chirbit
I Live Within

I live within a rev'rie, dance
to Mozart's symphonies and chance
to spread my wings and fly afar
upon imagination's star.

Of truth and knowledge, fine romance
until with jealousy, askance
does dogma take a jealous stance
and cleave and claw a bright red scar!
I live within.

Embrace I must the world and prance
and place a dream's hypnotic trance
upon the minds of those who are
so limited by judgement's glare.
To miracles!  To truth's advance!
I live within.

by Margaret Bednar, Art Happens 365, July 13, 2012

This rondeau poem (click on following link for specific rhyming pattern) is for Imaginary Garden with Real Toad's "Mary's Mixed Bag" AND Poetry Jam: Daydreaming.

My son pointed out a "fix".  Reverie did not work with the "count" for a rondeau, so I borrowed from Shakespeare (can't go wrong there, right? :)  (Reverie: daydream)

Believe it or not, Albert  Einstein was a daydreamer and considered that and perseverance his greatest assets.  (click for his QUOTES on daydreaming and similar things)  My poem is what I think he would like us all to do... embrace not just what WE know, but embrace the world so our knowledge, our truth, can expand!

A quote from him I love is:  "If you want your children to be intelligent, read them fairy tales.  If you want them to be more intelligent, read them more fairy tales."  I used the word "fancy" because it fit the rhythm of my structured poem.

What kind of daydream is kitty having in this "secondhand" bookstop?  


flipside records said...

Very nice. These are my favorites:

"until with jealousy, askance
does dogma take a jealous stance
and cleave and claw a bright red scar!"

"and place a dream's hypnotic trance
upon the minds of those who are
so limited by judgement's glare."

Ella said...

It had an enchanting spell type feel~
I love the symbols you used...
I loved it :D

Karishma Shetty said...

Beautiful Rondeau!!! :)
I love this line: and cleave and claw a bright red scar!

justine said...

what a fantastic poem and I love your accompanying shots

Mary said...

No better place to live oftentimes than within a daydream (reverie. Those who live within 'dogma' may be jealous and/or judgmental; but the problem is theirs. You used the rondeau form very well. (After writing one and reading so many, I am now in love with the form.) And so glad you submitted for both RT and Poetry Jam!

Daydreamertoo said...

Our daydreams (such as Einstein stated) is where some of our (and his) best ideas spring from because in the daydream our mind is wandering freely without the constraints we place on it through our mindful thought.
Loved all of this.
I expect the cat is thinking: 'What better place to be than in the sunshine tucked up with some good reading' :)

Mary Mansfield said...

I think it's quite fitting you borrowed that little apostrophe trick from Shakespeare, because this really has the feeling of the classic poetry we all grew up reading. So masterfully written! And a wonderful job by your son reading this, he definitely has an actor's voice. Thanks for sharing this with us over at Poetry Jam.

Laurie Kolp said...

Beautiful, Margaret... I especially like the first stanza & I love the refrain, too.

Einstein quotes are some of my favorites.

Hannah said...

Your son did a marvelous job reading this!!! You must be so make me feel so happy for the days when maybe my son will read my poetry!! Lil' bit of tear here....yes, it is so very special....your relationship with your son, your children...six of wonderful!!

Your poem is pure capture so well the essence of what your commentary speaks of, Margaret.

I've SO enjoyed this visit, thank you!

Brian Miller said...

to truths advance surely....i really like this...esp that last stanza margaret...loving that your son is into poetry...

Helen said...

You must thank Will for the reading ~~ from the lady in Bend! I could not (for the life of me) wrap my brain around writing a rondeau ... Your poem is a masterpiece, apostrophe and all!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow, what a wonderful read this was. Love the poem, love your musings following and LOVE the beautiful unusual collage with the kitty and the Dalai Lama. WAY cool! What a nice visit this was - a veritable feast:)!

Mama Zen said...


izzy said...

" upon imaginations star"

"Embrace I must the world and prance"

- two lines that grabbed me! thanks.

Day Dreamer said...

To miracles! To Truth's advance!

I love it!

Ginnie said...

Oh, how fun. Fairy tales and hearing the voice of your son!

Anonymous said...

This is one of the few forms I can get excited about, and I love what you've done here. Brilliant, way up there...