Thursday, January 13, 2011

Friday Flash 55, "All's Fair in Love and War"



All's Fair in Love and War

Some men notice breasts first, others, legs.
His weakness: eyes.
The evening she met "Dr. Right"
he confessed he believed
in love at first sight, whispering,
"I adore your Audrey Hepburn eyes and lashes".

Preparing for their third date, 
the mirror reflected worried baby blues.
Sighing, she opened the makeup drawer
for the necessary deception.

by Margaret Bednar

This is my first contribution to Friday Flash 55.  Tell a story in 55 words or less - and it is not easy!  Click HERE to be transported to G-Man's (aka "Mr. Know It All") Blog to read more short stories.

15 comments:

moondustwriter said...

Margaret so glad you came sweetie.

Aww the deception - he was missing out if he didn't realize her blue eyes were magnetic.

Great 55 - you're a natural

mOoNiE sMiLeS

moondustwriter said...
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moondustwriter said...

email me and I will teach you how to do the link
moondustwriter@gmail.com

Hugs

Brian Miller said...

oo...tricky tricky...the wily ways of luring mens hearts...smiles. nice 55..

g-man said...

Margaret Bednar....
In your very first attempt you have perfectly captured the essense of the Flash 55!
This was Excellent...
I hope you found this to be creative, challenging, and FUN!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End!

Jingle said...

wow, love your 55.

eyes, not breasts or legs...mmmm..

it reads like a movie clips, yours is better because it has details...

Happy Friday!

Alice Audrey said...

You'd think some men would look beyond the surface. And yet they don't.

Great 55!

Mama Zen said...

Hey, there are worse deceptions!

Excellent 55!

Jannie Funster said...

Ahhhhh, colored contacts! Well, love is deeper than eye-deep, tho! Let's hope.

Nice to meet ya, via G-Man!!

xo

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Great story, Margaret!
(You women-folk can be so devious! LOL!)

By the way, if you need help posting a direct link, I can help. (It's not too hard) Drop me a note at: ealder@hotmail.com

Monkey Man said...

Welcome to the Friday Flash Fiction 55 group. Yours is a great contribution. Hope to see you here again. Also, if you like short story challenges, try my Sunday 160.

Lulda Casadaga said...

Welcome to the "55" family...great firster!
i don't need any stinking colored contacts...I's got me some baby blues!! :D

Margaret Bednar said...

Moonduster, Brian, G-Man, Jingle, Alice, Mama Zen, Jannie, Eric, Monkey Man and Lulda - I finally got the courage up to try a bit of creative writing and it WAS fun. Thank you for all the kind comments. Can't wait for next Friday! :)

Ruth said...

Love this. :)

Margaret Bednar said...

Ruth, thank you! I have just finished one for next Friday. I think it is pretty funny. I have started a new blog (!!) to keep my creative writing separate from my poetry and photography. Hope you can catch it every now and then and let me know what you think. I think the conversations with Rilke are getting beyond me... I will continue to read them and the fun comments. I find myself understanding them differently at times and don't want to be a cog in the wheel... :)