by Margaret Bednar
Succulent, elegant, honey-sweet fruit
Elongated silhouette, global curve.
Aphrodite's prize, kingly gift, honored
Namesake of noble bishops, hallowed Saints.
Fragrantly delicious, white blossomed tree
The of remote Chinese antiquity.
Popularity too swiftly ripens
Usurped by distant cousin, short and squat.
"Unfairly pruned", the grievously laments
Family squabbling now doeth commence.
"Kind John Chapman desired to use my name
Earth's gift to Zeus's bride, and curer am I."
Of same grand rose tree ancestral descent
Flesh of grit versus skin, smooth and shiny.
Supermarket ratings pronounce the truth:
"Statistics do show, "apples float, pears sink."
Each line is 10 syllables, which I think flows better than my first attempt. I hope this is an improvement.
I am untutored in poetry - How do I use punctuation? for example. How important is it to have structure? What is the best way to learn? (I think I know that answer - keep following the blogs :) My son gave me some advice and encouragement today regarding poetry. (I visited him at the University and we "did laundry".) Boy have the tables turned, wasn't it just yesterday that I was teaching him?
This evening two of my girls and I attended a community theatre musical production of "Dirty Rotten Scoundrels". It is full of nice songs and comical characters! Steve Martin & Michael Cane star in the movie version.