Thorne Swift
I raise my eyes to sky of blue, quietly walk,
guard this place I internalize, scrutinize
her dappled light - a fairy's flutter?
Beauty wings t'ward water's edge; I follow,
clean(se) my feet, unwind this day - free ...
from burdens; seagulls sing, sailboats slide,
rust(icily) simple. Sigh and sink into sand -n- sun.
by Margaret Bednar, August 28, 2022
Linked with "dverse poets MTB: Vertical lines of kisses". This was a hard prompt. The line I chose was "I guard her beauty clean from rust". Each line begins with each successive word in the sentence. I took some photos of a nature preserve that leads to a gorgeous beach on Lake Michigan and wanted to tie it in to this challenge. I tried for over an hour to keep the meter of the chosen line but the words did not allow me to do that so I scratched it out and started over. This beach is a 20 minute drive from my home and it is not as well known as others - I felt like it was all my own!
Also linked with "Poets and Storytellers United - Friday Writings #41"
7 comments:
An interesting challenge! And a beautiful evocation of place and mood.
The seashore treats us to so many beautiful sights.
I love what you did here...
I used the same line but yours was infinitely more happy.
I am thoroughly IMPRESSED!! After an hour of trying, I decided my sanity wasn't worth it.
What a lovely piece! Very evocative and serene.
This is nice, Margaret. I can visualize (I claim that's a talent that I do not have) going down closer to the water and relaxing and soaking up the sun. I chose an easier line, I made and acrostic out of it, that worked well and fairly fast. Link here,
https://jimmiehov6.blogspot.com/2022/08/lover-advice-word-acrostic.html?m=0
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A golden shovel beautifully done.
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