Thursday, January 9, 2014

"Opening Night"

New York at Night - Vivienne Gucwa

Opening Night

South of Midtown
weathered pavers slow my step,
street lamps shroud my shoulders

as I of scripts long since shelved,
resurrect, reminisce; recall mentors' advice,
Mother's biased praise, Father's proud gaze.

Embrace tonight's afterglow
as a new beginning to be handled with care -
the applause, excitement, standing ovation.

Hopefully remain convinced critic's reviews
won't matter.

by Margaret Bednar, January 9, 2014

This is for The Mag #201 and also will be linked with Friday Flash 55 after 8pm.  My son is in his Jr. year of college as a drama major.  I know he has his heart set on New York…    The poem isn't quite what I wanted it to be - I will probably come back at a later date and flesh it out a bit more… but for now, 55 words is all I have time for.  Go visit both links - the talent is amazing.


22 comments:

TexWisGirl said...

really nice feel to this one, margaret.

hedgewitch said...

There's lots of mood in this, and it suits the photo of the foggy cobblestones--that place in our mind is similar, where we wander with odd scraps of hopes and dreams. Enjoyed it, Margaret.

Grace said...

I like embracing of the night's afterglow ~ When you love what you do, you can live with the critics reviews ~ Good luck to your son~

TALON said...

Oh, that last stanza, Margaret! Perfection. I hope he does remember to ignore the critics and always embrace the art.

grapeling said...

looks like you got a spammer, Margaret :(

good luck with your son. creative bunch, you have ~

Alice Audrey said...

You capture his hopes and dreams perfectly. I don't think you need to flesh it out much.

Aditi said...

Beautiful Margaret... Esp loved the last stanza :) All the very best to your son!

Ginnie said...

Those of us who watch from afar can picture it all for you and him, Margaret!

aspiritofsimplicity said...

i like this. What an exciting time in life for your son

Brian Miller said...

you know...the critics are double edged...we should listen enough to pick up if something is off, but then again we have to understand their motives as well...some are just critical because that is who they are...

Yvonne Osborne said...

Ah, yes, the damn critics.

I like this quote, but he's no relation! "Asking a working writer what he thinks about critics is like asking a lamppost what it feels about dogs." -John Osborne

Yes, praise needs to be handled with care. I wish your son much success. Tis a noble profession!

G-Man said...

A bit 'Noir-ish' to me it seems.
But thats what makes this so cool!
NYC is the place to be for writers of his ilk.
Loved your 55 Margaret
Also....Holy Cow on your new Avatar pic.
You are TRULY one of the most beautiful woman on the planet...
Inside and out!
Thanks for playing and your great support, have a Kick Ass Week-End

howanxious said...

Beautiful. For an artist, the praise of the audience matters the most. I loved the environment you created in the beginning.
-HA

Nara Malone said...

I try not to read reviews. Good ones make you feel like you can't possibly top what you did and the bad ones haunt you through every word of the next project. I liked the Noir mood of this.

Amrit Sinha said...

It is so peaceful and beautiful ... and the last stanza sums it all perfectly :-)

Mary said...

How exciting that your son is aiming for New York! That would definitely be an exciting life!

Mama Zen said...

I like this very much, Margaret.

razzamadazzle said...

I do enjoy this one. You've packed a lot into those 55 words.

kaykuala said...

Good for him, Marge! With such a talented mother he has it made. it all comes within the mold. Great 55!

Hank

Lydia said...

Your 55 words did it for me, satisfied the image and also made me hope for more of the back story.

My cousin's son also dreamed of New York while obtaining his degree in drama. He has never been "tapped" for huge fame per se', but has joyously made his living acting for decades now, in celebrated plays in NYC, in roles in movies, TV series episodes, and commercials. He absolutely loves his craft and his life! I wish the same for your son.

Helen said...

You know how much I love reading poetry about your children ... this is no exception.

My nephew does make a living in Columbus as an actor ... a few B films, lots of plays, commercials. Helps that his wife has a full time job as drama director at a local high school. With three offspring to raise, they need her full time wages and health insurance.

~T~ said...

Opening night is always a thrill! Well done.