Thursday, October 3, 2013

"Behold"


Behold

Lonely is often beholden to the blight 
of winter's questionable grace,

yet sheltered beneath fall's golden light,
I realize love just drifts, where words of love 

once crooned beside summer's redolent roses
is replayed.  I tuck them away, 

linger beneath a cranberry canopy, alone, 
look past winter and behold a new spring.

by Margaret Bednar, October 3, 2013



This is linked to "Poetry Jam - Backwards".  We are to find a poem and write it backwards, not word for word, but line for line.  I did change it up a bit, but I think stayed true to the intent for the most part.  This poem was originally written in November of 2012 in the form below:

Alone

Beneath a cranberry canopy
I linger, replay words of love
once crooned beneath spring's canopy
of roses; love in full bloom.  Love
has drifted, this canopy shelters
only me.  Yet I find I'm not lonely
beneath fall's golden light, this shelter
where I embrace alone, beholden lonely
to the blight of winter's questionable grace.

by Margaret Bednar, 11-18-2012


14 comments:

Brian Miller said...

interesting...had not thought of using an old poem to try and go backward...makes me think of reading an old love note...the tucking away of it...cool piece margaret...

Laurie Kolp said...

I'm so glad you did it this way, Margaret. I hope it was a fun challenge for you. I have to say... I think I like it the new way better!

Cressida de Nova said...

I like the new version as well. Just beautiful!

Fireblossom said...

Wow! Gorgeous photographs!

TALON said...

Beautiful photography (as always) and beautiful words. What a unique thing - to reverse it. I think you handled it perfectly, Margaret.

manicddaily said...

So cool! k.

Jeanne said...

Love your photos! especially the brilliant reds of this second shot!

Mary said...

Your poem is lovely both ways, Margaret.

alan1704 said...

Really great idea and both old and new were really good. This was really nicely worked.

Gabriella said...

A very nice poem both ways Margaret! I like the idea of tucking "words of love" away.

SaraV said...

Margaret,beautiful photos! Perfect for the poem and what a great idea to rework an old poem--I really like how it came out:-)

Kathryn said...

I love what you've done with this. The play of old to new, new to old. Works so well both ways.

Loredana Donovan said...

Enchanting poem! I love both versions. I like the idea of tucking away love words, sweet :)

sreeja harikrishnan said...

Beautiful!