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| A painting on the wall outside the Taubman Art Museum in Roanoke, VA |
Time
spins
and we
become sovereign,
lord of creation -
until God laughs and changes the rules.
by Margaret Bednar, August 25, 2013
There are two ways to pronounce "sovereign" (son-rin and sov-er-in) The first is the one I used for this poem, which is a Fib(onacci). Click over to Imaginary Garden of Real Toad's for details.
In my opinion, God is Truth and truth never changes. Human definitions of what truth is does change and often in ways to meet our desires. And like a parent with a child, God must set us on a course unexpected, but for our own good. (Just a bit of reflection on my first poem)
I tried to research this form further. I understand the word count (there are various ways to write it) but I am not sure if it is supposed to be a "fib". My above form is a bit sarcastic, but let me try again and create a "fib" for this fine Sunday morning.
If Only
Time
spins
and we
willingly change,
virtues not vices
honed; lessons learned from our ancestors.
by Margaret Bednar, August 25, 2013
I tried to research this form further. I understand the word count (there are various ways to write it) but I am not sure if it is supposed to be a "fib". My above form is a bit sarcastic, but let me try again and create a "fib" for this fine Sunday morning.
If Only
Time
spins
and we
willingly change,
virtues not vices
honed; lessons learned from our ancestors.
by Margaret Bednar, August 25, 2013
13 comments:
Margaret--the contraction 'fib' is just that, a shorter way to say the form-name, so subject-wise there is no need to focus on honesty or the lack of it. ;_) But double entendre is just fine, too of course.
Both of these are great examples of the form--I had trouble with the shorter, syllable counting variety as it condensed so much, but it seems to have really worked well for you. Your first one with its sharper tone is my favorite, and also because I really like the word 'sovereign.' Great mural to use for your jump-off point, too.
Thanks for taking the time to play today, Margaret--it sounds like you're going through a very busy period, so it's doubly appreciated.
I too like the first one of these--it feels edgy to me and I really like that--I can't comment on the form as I do not know much about it--but I really enjoyed the first one of these!
I liked them both! I love how you shared a smart witted ending-it works well here, with this subject!
Well Done
The first is my favorite; both incorporate the form beautifully. I think that beauty and probably mathematics are immutable and well posited here. Lovely.
Your Sunday introspection has delivered two fine poems, Margaret.
Lovely fib poems Margaret ~ Time spins but we are not the ultimate spinner nor the game changer ~ Hopefully we learn from our ancestors ~
I enjoyed both of your Sunday Fibs ... (that sounds funny, yes?)
Interesting contemplations, Margaret.
K
ha-ain't that the truth! I especially like the snappiness of the first. Cool shot too :)
I love the way the first one bares its teeth! Marvelous work with the form.
I know about the first, I've felt that way--but after snarling and lashing out at being fooled, in calm I find the second is closer to the truth.
Love it Margaret!! So true!
Personally friend ~ I agree, Truth is truth, there ARE absolutes and, we humans are the rule changers... Especially when it requires US to do the changing & returning to truth! Wonderful writing filled with truth~ Fondly Debbie
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