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| South Carolina Beauties |
I see the day's heat
reflected in sugar brown-eyes,
watch it caress
massive cinnamon shoulders,
tickle a torturous path
beneath rounded bellies,
allow a moment's gasp
beneath buzzing magnolia blooms
before gentle beasts press forward
toward a destiny weary.
With a burden twice as heavy,
I straighten my shoulders,
and seek a disposition
as accepting.
by Margaret Bednar, May 9, 2013
This is for Imaginary Garden with Real Toad's Kerry's Wednesday Challenge: The Prelude. It is a poem that is set up as an introductory - a poem not meant to be finished, does not tell the whole story... I hope I succeeded. Flip on over to the Garden to read much better attempts.
This is also for Friday Flash 55, a story for the G-Man in 55 words (no more, no less).
I am taking a BLOGGER BREAK for perhaps a week. I will be catching up on my visiting and commenting (of which I am dreadfully behind!), but will not be posting any new poems or photos. I will be on a mini-vacation celebrating my 23rd wedding anniversary and then moving my daughter out of her school dorm and watching her graduate! How can I be this old?
19 comments:
This definitely paints the beginning of a picture, both of a journey, and the traveler on the road. Congratulations on 23 years, Margaret, and on your daughter's graduation. As the years have come tumbling down, I've found this saying useful: "Pick an age you like, and stick with it." ;_)
nice one. enjoy your break!
It's like you took Eliot's 'lonely cab horse' and transported it to a friendlier environment. There is a warmth in your description, and a tender love of the horses comes through very clearly.
I was loving the "sugar brown eyes" and the "massive cinnamon shoulders" of your gentle beasts, until I read "with a burden twice as heavy" — but the last two lines are my favorite...what a prelude, Margaret!
"Will she, won't she, be granted a disposition as accepting?" That is my question.
K
Lovely prelude ! lovely horses too of course. Enjoy your break-
Your adoration of the Equine is so beautiful Margaret
And I DO appreciate your weekly support.
You are a treasure to the world
Your kids are so fortunate to be your kids.
Loved your perfect 55
Thanks for playing...Congratulations... Have a Kick Ass Week End
This is a beautiful prelude. Congratulations on 23 years and the kid graduating. Amazing how quickly we grow old.
Congrats on 23 yrs and your daughter's graduation :D
Beautifully expressed!
Beautiful horses and a lovely poem!
My son graduated high school five years ago. I felt proud and a little long in the tooth. Congratulations to your daughter!
very nice these horses
This is breathtakingly beautiful.It moved me on so many levels.Your point of view wanders and takes on different strengths.
The image is equally impressive. This is definitely one of those "I wish I had written this" poems. Or even thought of it.
You should be proud.
Oh I think you've met both challenges wonderfully. Congratulations on your anniversary and the momentous graduation. My daughter graduates next weekend too! How did our children get so old?
This is really beautiful, Margaret!
Happy Anniversary! And, congratulations to your daughter!
Sometimes it does feel as heavy as a wagon load. And it's hard to be as accepting as a draft horse.
Margaret, I liked the way you analyzed the horses' dilemma and then compared it to your own heavy load... and that's where the prelude ends. With questions. Is it a psychic load? A physical load? Hard to tell, and that's why your answer to the prompt was so good.
And yes, the brown-eyed thing (wink)... Amy
Lovely 55, and lovely photo.
Lovely. Have a good break.
Beautiful working horses, beautiful prelude.
Mother's Day, wedding anniversary, daughter's graduation....enough to kepp you from posting for more than a week! Brava to you for all you accomplish, Margaret. Your South Carolina beauties seem most appropriate for where you are in your life right now! :)
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