Thursday, February 21, 2013

Friday Flash 55 "Evening Haze"


Evening Haze

A muted silver haze
drapes its cloak
upon the winter pond,
envelopes me with a pair
of luminous swans
in a world of quietude.

Lethargic ripples
tickle the murky shore
where cattails
and winter grass
passively sway
and a blue heron's
shadow sweeps
the water's breadth.

I break the silence
whisper "Amen"
and walk home.

by Margaret Bednar, February 21, 2013

This is linked with Friday Flash 55 - supposedly fiction, but Mr-G is very lenient (don't tell him I said that :)  Whatever you write, it must be 55 words, no more, no less. 

22 comments:

TexWisGirl said...

(i know my eyes are tired as i read ripples as nipples - for a second i thought i was at fireblossom's place. :))

i liked the amen. :)

Margaret said...

Ha ha. I even went back and checked! That would put a whole different spin on this poem. :)

Brian Miller said...

ah...now that breathe felt good...lov ethe nature imagery...the moment you captured...and especially breathing it in myself...nice margaret

Mama Zen said...

This is soothing to the soul. I adore the last stanza.

brandi said...

It must be exposure to all the poetry on Fridays. Usually, I struggle to get the meaning of a lot of poetry, but tonight I am ALL OVER IT with understanding. I GET IT! And this was beautiful!

Rastaman said...

I loved all 55 words ... reminded me of an evening I spent at Lake Toho.

TALON said...

Thank you for the serenity, Margaret. I'm still laughing over your response to my 55 (and the answer is, "Of course!) :)

lime said...

what a lovely peaceful scene.

hedgewitch said...

There is nothing more peaceful than lethargic nipples, I say...(sorry--that cracked me up.) This is lovely and soothing, Margaret, and a great misty, moody shot of those swans.

G-Man said...

Margaret Bednar...
If you just threw this together as you claim. I bow before your greatness...
Loved your Hazy Cygnet 55
Thanks for always providing Top Shelf Entertainment. (For Free!!)
Have a Kick Ass Week-End

(Loved your Petosky Pic and Poem)

Margaret said...

G-man. If only Mama Zen said 55 instead of 48!! And I do miss that window seat. And yes, I wrote the poem in 10 minutes. I almost panicked when I realized it was 8 pm THURSDAY!

Alice Audrey said...

I did the throw-a-poem-together in 10 minute thing too, but yours came out much nicer and kinder than mine. I blame my current WIP.

anthonynorth said...

Beautiful, tranquil words.

Yvonne Osborne said...

I love this picture and your hazy poem, the luminous swans. Wonderful description. I have a pond but I fear it's not as pretty.

(I could never get anything together in ten minutes, never make it by 8pm.)

izzy said...

Perfect response to say Amen! I love your winter water and its denizens-

razzamadazzle said...

This is perfectly beautiful! The picture and poem both truly deserve an amen.

turtlememoir said...

Beautiful! And 'Amen' is probably the first (and only) response that would come to me had I been there... Consider it uttered here as an appropriate response to your poem.

Other Mary said...

What a beautiful, peaceful mood you set with this. And 'Amen' is the perfect ending. Have a good weekend Margaret.

Ginnie said...

I like the Amen, too! And since we see pairs of swans all over the polder all year 'round, this is very special, Margaret.

Brian Miller said...

this one. smiles.

Margaret said...

Thanks, Brian! Let me know when the article is published or posted or whatever :)

tsw said...

Ahhhh...beautiful. (I love swans) Thank you.