Monday, April 11, 2011

"Fading Images", a poem 195-197/365


Fading Images

Barking dogs signal it might be time.
Bare feet slap against hardwood floor,
"Love you, I'll be back early afternoon"
rings in his hopeful little head.

Coolness presses against soft cheek.
Steam collects upon the windowpane.
Slumping shoulders indicate no such luck.
Feet tread a woeful retreat.  Again.

Time drudgingly marches on
weighing heavily upon his youthful heart.
"Love you, I'll be back early afternoon"
Deeply desired, is this timbered voice's return.

Daydreaming of guiding hands, teaching hands;
of conquering "shiny red", together.
Balancing and gliding on wheels of two.
Images of dad flicker.  And start to fade.

by Margaret Bednar, Art Happens, 4-11-11

This is in response to Kell's (see my sidebar)  daily poetry challenge day #11.  It is:  Write a poem that begins with the last thing you can remember someone saying to you today or yesterday.  See if you can use that line two or three times.

My husband uttered the words "Love you, I'll be back early afternoon" to me early this morning.  I was still sleeping and they barely registered.   He is a GREAT dad and despite his long work schedule seems to always come through for the kids (and me).  So this poem is not about him (just wanted to clarify!)

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One Stop Poetry's "Monday's One Stop Poetry Form" is hosting Anne Welch Shadorma.  She is introducing the poetic form "shadorma".  It is similar to the haiku and tanka, but of Spanish decent.  It has no rhyme scheme (yeah!) and is a syllabic poem with the following syllabic structure:  3/5/3/3/7/5.

I took the above poem and gave it a whirl!

Fading Images (2)

youthful heart
time weighs heavily
hopeful still
for bonding
images of dad flicker
slowly fade away

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This is my first photograph taken with my NEW CAMERA!  (and that is why I have selected this for this week's "Creative Exchange" entry)  I was saving up for a Canon 5DMark II, but finally decided to go with the Canon EOS Rebel T2i.  I was given some advice that this is a great camera for the price and to focus on collecting a few great lenses. As I have been itching to get into manual mode, I think this will be at least a great starter camera for the next couple of years.  From what I can gather, this camera was used to film "Black Swan".  

So, my cranky kitty was rudely bothered from his "nap" to be my LAST "autofocus" photograph with my new camera.  I am now entering the world of ISO's, RAW, Aperture...  Wish me luck!

And one last macro with my "old" camera for "Macro Monday".


15 comments:

lisa said...

Margaret, I just loved that poem! Especially special since it's the last thing my son said to me as I left for work this morning, and he left for Boston for a few days.

CONGRATULATIONS on the T2i. From everything I've read, and anyone I know who has it, it is a wonderful camera. Also, once you go to manual mode, you will wonder how you ever did without it. Have a great time with it, and I look forward to seeing your photos from it here!

Thank you so much for sharing this today at The Creative Exchange.

Have a fantastic day!

lisa.

Brian Miller said...

mmm...lots to absorb in your second one...you achieved depth of emotion with a deft hand in few words...

Reflections said...

Wonderful selection here... your shadorma stands strong within the images created.

I too am dabbling in manual mode, then flip back for a bit to the auto mode, always returning to figure out manual again. Good luck with the adventure!

Pat said...

Your kitty looks sooo happy to have his picture taken! :) It is a lovely shot. Have fun with your new camera!

Rosie said...

Another wonderful blog, Margaret! I love your poems and congratulations on your new camera! Beautiful start!!! :-)

Sheila Moore said...

enjoyed your shadorma, it is sad yet reflective

EG Wow said...

Beautiful poem and I love the photo of what I think might be a magnolia blossom. :)

Linda Makiej said...

your poem is wonderful as are your photos!!

Kala said...

haha - your cat does look annoyed. Love the image of the magnolia bloom.

Bonnie said...

Magnificent macro Margaret!

You seem to be blessed with a fount of poems that want to spring forth from your pen. How wonderful that you have found your voice.

So many talents give you so many vehicles of expression!

forgetmenot said...

Lovely flower, captured perfectly. Have fun with your new camera--can't imagine you can improve on some of the photos that you have taken in the past, but I know you'll have fun trying. Mickie

justine said...

love your poem and your shots and your new camera!! enjoy!

Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillow said...

Nicely done, Margaret. I like the idea of distilling the essence of the longer poem into the short-form shadorma.

Margaret said...

Lisa - Thank you ! I am still reading the manual and NERVOUS to really work with it... isn't that funny!

Brian - Well, thank you. I love being challenged by One Stop.

Reflections, Pat & Rosie - Thanks. My joy of photography has really surprised me - even the fact that I want to switch to manual amazes me. We will see in a few weeks if it is a good idea! :)

Shelia - Childhood is hard and so is parenthood. It is impossible to be there for them EVERY time. Work does often get in the way...

EGWow - Yes, Magnolias of many types here in the South. I love them.

Linda & Kala - The flowers here a so amazing - I never want to go inside my house...

Bonnie - well, I took up the challenge of a poem a day for the month of April (Poetry month) Not sure it was the best thing for Quality, though. :)

Mickie - I need to work on "noise" for one thing. Thanks for the encouragement!

Justine - :) can't wait to see more of London!

Lorenzo - yes, for someone like me who can ramble on and on, it is a very nice exercise. :)

A Rosy Note said...

What pretty pictures! Your kitty's adorable. I have the same camera as you...I love it :)

~Tricia