Monday, February 21, 2011

Tanka - "Reassuring Promise", Haiku - "Bliss", 145/365


Reassuring Promise

Fall's fading embrace
Promises a future spring
As your lips touch mine,
Your last breath reassuring
"Goodbye" is not forever.

by Margaret Bednar






The above poem is a Tanka for "One Stop Poetry Form Monday".  I suppose one could say it is similar to a haiku, but more difficult.  The traditional Tanka hints at a season and has a 5-7-5-7-7 syllable count.  What I find intriguing is that the third line is the "bridge" and actually ties two poems that could stand on their own, together.  I believe it is supposed to involve the senses more than sentiment.  I'm thinking mine leans more towards sentiment, but this is my attempt.  Click on One Stop (above) to learn more.  This week it is co-hosted with Lady Nyo.  She has a book coming out soon via lulu.com entitled "White Cranes of Heaven".    The second photo above is for "Macro Monday."


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We had wonderful weather this past weekend.  Or so we thought, we transplants from the northern state of Michigan.  Almost 60 degrees, I believe.  Which means shorts and t-shirts for our gang - we did get a few strange looks from people who were still wearing jackets.  The photo below is for "The Creative Exchange".  None of them are perfectly lit, but I believe they capture the joy of the moment.




Skipping and laughing
Hearts soaring with spring's promise
Bliss is this moment


The above poem is for the February Monthly "Haiku Challenge".  The prompt word is "bliss".



The photo below is for "Patterns and Repetitions in February".



I played hooky from house work and today I am suffering the consequences.  Isn't that when we pitch more than we keep?  It does make things easier - and it's a good thing the kids are in school when this style of "cleaning" occurs!

28 comments:

Lisa Gordon said...

You are truly an inspiration Margaret. I've never even heard of a Tanka! The second photograph from the bottom has my heart. Just LOVE it.

Thank you so much for sharing these at The Creative Exchange this week.

Have a wonderful day.

lisa.

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

love your Haiku.
the imagery is timeless.

jo©o said...

Hiya Margaret,
What a fabulously fun-filled post, filled with laughter, beauty and information.
Having written hauku, and finding very satisfying, you are now pushing me into trying that complicated expanded form of the tanka.

Dishilicious said...

blissful! :)

forgetmenot said...

Oh Margaret, You put me to shame!!! This morning I just wrote a ridiculously silly limerick for a Ruby Tuesday post, and here you are writing absolutely inspiring poems. The "Bliss" picture is beautiful and the Tanka is lovely. Add another "notch" to your belt. Lovely work. Mickie

Anonymous said...

Tanka is amazing really delicious!

Helen said...

Your tanka and haiku are incredible ... together with the stunning images ~ the perfect Monday morning gift!

Rosie Grey said...

Beautiful poems and gorgeous photos - it's always such a treat to come here to your blog, Margaret!

Sweepy said...

Woof!
I can transport my furry self into your pattern world. I think I can attempt a haiku when I am done trying to think how it is done. ;-)

Evelyn S. said...

Lovely photos, Margaret! I wasn't familiar with a tanka, but I am now! Your Creative Exchange choice is such a good one...the energy and happiness certainly radiate from that image!

Anonymous said...

Vilka fina bilder! Very fine pictures!

Maude Lynn said...

I think that you did an excellent job with the bridge line. It's a gorgeous tanka.

Kala said...

Wonderful details in the macros of the striped flower petals!

Lui said...

What clean, clear shots and introspection.

Have a great creative week!

signed...bkm said...

Love your tanka and haiku..how they express the beauty in the photos of blooming flowers and blooming children....bkm

Pat said...

Beautiful post! The children look like they're delighted to be free - of heavy coats, boots, hats and mittens!

Carol Blackburn said...

Great shots, Margaret.. Oh my, are those crocuses in your garden! Your poetry is wonderul, too.

Reflections said...

Loved the Tanka and Haiku... and the photos are stunning. Captured moments well done!

Brian Miller said...

looks like a lot of fun in the pics...great tanka...goodbye is not forever...i like that...

Anonymous said...

Your bliss Haiku with joyful photography is perfectly combined. Thank you for sharing. ~becca~

http://beccagivens.wordpress.com/2011/02/21/no-alarms/

Margaret said...

I sat down way to late to respond to all of these wonderful comments. I am thrilled that each of you enjoyed my post. I will visit your blogs in the morning over my coffee! ;)

Anonymous said...

Spring is on its way! Yay! This is a lovely set of photos. My favourite is probably the penultimate - children happily exploring and the sparkling water in the background. :)

trisha said...

splendid haiku and tanka.

the photographs are mind blowing. your posts are visual delight.

trisha
http://sharmishthabasu.wordpress.com/2011/02/20/bliss/

Dutchbaby said...

Gorgeous crocuses, or is it croci? It looks like a bumblebee's been rummaging around in the one in the close-up.

Looks like your kids live in "Calvin and Hobbes" country.

Margaret said...

Finally had a chance to sit for a late coffee and enjoy all your blogs! Better than reading the newspaper any day! Thanks for the laughter, awe and some very poignant thoughts this morning.

Unknown said...

Beautiful crocus! I also loved remembering fall through your photos. Can't wait for spring!

LisaF said...

Your Creative Exchange photo perfectly represents your heart in one hand. I love how they are holding hands and running together. Pure joy.

Margaret said...

To both Lisas - Is that what the flower is called. I am terrible when it comes to recognizing what they are. And I LOVE taking photos that are filled with emotion. Thanks for seeing it.