Thursday, February 21, 2013

Friday Flash 55 "Evening Haze"


Evening Haze

A muted silver haze
drapes its cloak
upon the winter pond,
envelopes me with a pair
of luminous swans
in a world of quietude.

Lethargic ripples
tickle the murky shore
where cattails
and winter grass
passively sway
and a blue heron's
shadow sweeps
the water's breadth.

I break the silence
whisper "Amen"
and walk home.

by Margaret Bednar, February 21, 2013

This is linked with Friday Flash 55 - supposedly fiction, but Mr-G is very lenient (don't tell him I said that :)  Whatever you write, it must be 55 words, no more, no less. 
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22 comments:

  1. TexWisGirlFebruary 21, 2013 at 8:36 PM

    (i know my eyes are tired as i read ripples as nipples - for a second i thought i was at fireblossom's place. :))

    i liked the amen. :)

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  2. MargaretFebruary 21, 2013 at 8:40 PM

    Ha ha. I even went back and checked! That would put a whole different spin on this poem. :)

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  3. Brian MillerFebruary 21, 2013 at 8:59 PM

    ah...now that breathe felt good...lov ethe nature imagery...the moment you captured...and especially breathing it in myself...nice margaret

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  4. Maude LynnFebruary 21, 2013 at 9:05 PM

    This is soothing to the soul. I adore the last stanza.

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  5. UnknownFebruary 21, 2013 at 9:16 PM

    It must be exposure to all the poetry on Fridays. Usually, I struggle to get the meaning of a lot of poetry, but tonight I am ALL OVER IT with understanding. I GET IT! And this was beautiful!

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  6. RastamanFebruary 21, 2013 at 9:28 PM

    I loved all 55 words ... reminded me of an evening I spent at Lake Toho.

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  7. TALONFebruary 21, 2013 at 9:56 PM

    Thank you for the serenity, Margaret. I'm still laughing over your response to my 55 (and the answer is, "Of course!) :)

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  8. limeFebruary 21, 2013 at 10:02 PM

    what a lovely peaceful scene.

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  9. hedgewitchFebruary 21, 2013 at 10:31 PM

    There is nothing more peaceful than lethargic nipples, I say...(sorry--that cracked me up.) This is lovely and soothing, Margaret, and a great misty, moody shot of those swans.

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  10. G-ManFebruary 21, 2013 at 10:32 PM

    Margaret Bednar...
    If you just threw this together as you claim. I bow before your greatness...
    Loved your Hazy Cygnet 55
    Thanks for always providing Top Shelf Entertainment. (For Free!!)
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End

    (Loved your Petosky Pic and Poem)

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  11. MargaretFebruary 21, 2013 at 10:48 PM

    G-man. If only Mama Zen said 55 instead of 48!! And I do miss that window seat. And yes, I wrote the poem in 10 minutes. I almost panicked when I realized it was 8 pm THURSDAY!

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  12. Alice AudreyFebruary 22, 2013 at 1:49 AM

    I did the throw-a-poem-together in 10 minute thing too, but yours came out much nicer and kinder than mine. I blame my current WIP.

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  13. anthonynorthFebruary 22, 2013 at 3:22 AM

    Beautiful, tranquil words.

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  14. Yvonne OsborneFebruary 22, 2013 at 7:01 AM

    I love this picture and your hazy poem, the luminous swans. Wonderful description. I have a pond but I fear it's not as pretty.

    (I could never get anything together in ten minutes, never make it by 8pm.)

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  15. izzyFebruary 22, 2013 at 8:58 AM

    Perfect response to say Amen! I love your winter water and its denizens-

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  16. AnonymousFebruary 22, 2013 at 11:41 AM

    This is perfectly beautiful! The picture and poem both truly deserve an amen.

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  17. AnonymousFebruary 22, 2013 at 2:07 PM

    Beautiful! And 'Amen' is probably the first (and only) response that would come to me had I been there... Consider it uttered here as an appropriate response to your poem.

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  18. Other MaryFebruary 22, 2013 at 6:54 PM

    What a beautiful, peaceful mood you set with this. And 'Amen' is the perfect ending. Have a good weekend Margaret.

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  19. Ginnie HartFebruary 26, 2013 at 11:07 AM

    I like the Amen, too! And since we see pairs of swans all over the polder all year 'round, this is very special, Margaret.

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  20. Brian MillerAugust 21, 2013 at 9:57 PM

    this one. smiles.

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  21. MargaretAugust 21, 2013 at 11:15 PM

    Thanks, Brian! Let me know when the article is published or posted or whatever :)

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  22. tswAugust 24, 2013 at 1:09 PM

    Ahhhh...beautiful. (I love swans) Thank you.

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