Wednesday, January 13, 2016

"Undone"




"Undone"

Her lacy corset's frayed,
parchment thin.
Season's light shines through,
settles upon delicate arms,
skywardly raised
as slender spirits come undone,
slip outside her bark, disrobe -
drape remnants upon crisp, cool breeze.

Finches bob and sing
alongside tasseled catkins,
closed, awaiting spring
but first the forest hushes, stills
joins the dance,
doff's colorful robe -

prepares for winter's white.

by Margaret Bednar, January 13, 20156


This is for "Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Artistic Interpretations - Maria Wulf's Visual Poetry".  This challenge will be up and running Thursday (January 14) at noon.  Please come and join the fun.   Maria Wulf is a fiber artist and her blog is "Full Moon Fiber Arts"


I invite you to listen to me read this poem:  Yikes.  I usually have a photograph that goes with my poem, but the video is above that I drew inspiration from - so soundcloud used my photo instead... I made it the smallest size I could ;P

13 comments:

  1. Indeed, precious
    Well don margaret
    good luck

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  2. We chose the same video! I like yours better than mine.

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  3. this is nice all the background movement and sounds applied

    much love...

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  4. I loved your reading of the poem.. and the way you used the video to present it... there is a sense of dancing and of robes in those birchbark strips.... wonderful

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  5. So lovely to hear you read your poem, Margaret. And the picture is perfect!

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  6. Margaret. I'm soothed by the slippery s's in this delicate dance. Seems right

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  7. Love your title and the quiet dance...beautiful poetry and reading, Margaret! Thank you, for the challenge!:)

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  8. love the feel of movement in this writing, perfectly accompanies the dancing stalks. so calm, this waiting change of season. lovely.

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  9. I like how you made this piece so delicate and feminine. Lovely. I can't listen for some reason. I'll be back to try again!

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  10. as slender spirits come undone,
    slip outside her bark, disrobe -
    drape remnants upon crisp, cool breeze.

    Perfect picture of the changeover to a new season - to bare all and remain pure white and breezy until such time it'll be greenery again. Great reading Marge!

    Hank

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  11. lovely personification... wonderful description too

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  12. Lovely, Margaret. You were very well inspired by this 'visual art'. Thank you for yours and for prompting us.
    ..

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  13. Lovely prompt and lovely response.

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