Friday, January 30, 2015

"Supplication"


Supplication

Beneath lavender clouds
I walk fields of scented rows;
morning's first blush saturated with
devotion -

and with lips hesitantly shy,
I reacquaint and caress verse
pocketed long ago; childhood's seeds
taking root.

by Margaret Bednar, January 30, 2015


This is linked with "Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Transforming Thursday - Lavender Fields" and "dVerse - Meeting the Bar  - The Cinquain expanded"  dVerse asked us to add a syllable to the traditional cinquain format - so the count is 3-5-7-9-3.


Nature - especially sunrise and sunset - moves me, as I'm sure it does most people.  As for my poem, I think this is many a parent's wish - that children, if they stray from their faith, will one day find a way back to what was instilled in them at a young age. 
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30 comments:

  1. SusanJanuary 30, 2015 at 10:39 AM

    You take this there, as if lavender was for remembrance and presence together.

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  2. brudbergJanuary 30, 2015 at 10:48 AM

    Those lavender clouds.. I love when you have those.. A lovely sensual poem fitting both prompts.. Kudos.

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  3. AnonymousJanuary 30, 2015 at 10:52 AM

    I'm kind of holding on to that thought for myself. Wonderful,Margaret

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  4. 21 WitsJanuary 30, 2015 at 11:29 AM

    I'm hooked on lavender now! Lovely post.

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  5. UnknownJanuary 30, 2015 at 11:36 AM

    I bet you, I love this piece. Nice art work.

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  6. AnonymousJanuary 30, 2015 at 11:50 AM

    Lovely writing, Margaret ... and an expression of every parent's fondest wish.

    Tony

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  7. MaryJanuary 30, 2015 at 12:21 PM

    I love the similarities as well as the contrasts in both stanzas.....together they are a beautiful 'whole.'

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  8. GabriellaJanuary 30, 2015 at 12:25 PM

    I always enjoy what you show us of the nature around you. I can also understand your fears and hopes concerning your children's faith.

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  9. AnonymousJanuary 30, 2015 at 12:38 PM

    Simply beautiful.

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  10. Brian MillerJanuary 30, 2015 at 12:49 PM

    love the spiritual side of this...when hiking once I came onto a field of lavender...wow it intoxicating how powerful the scent was as I walked through...

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  11. UnknownJanuary 30, 2015 at 1:35 PM

    very spiritual, a meditation in a way... The scent of lavender is one of my favorites: it's strong, yet has softness and not harsh...

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  12. AnonymousJanuary 30, 2015 at 1:56 PM

    when I read these, I think of "innocent and pure" - well penned

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  13. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 30, 2015 at 2:00 PM

    So lovely. These scents take me back to childhood, too.

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  14. JazzbumpaJanuary 30, 2015 at 2:20 PM

    beautifully constructed and
    a pleasure to read

    cheers
    jzb

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  15. Maude LynnJanuary 30, 2015 at 2:27 PM

    Beautiful. Really beautiful, Margaret.

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  16. UnknownJanuary 30, 2015 at 3:35 PM

    Your last line took me in a different direction. I like that.

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  17. AnonymousJanuary 30, 2015 at 4:05 PM

    "verse pocketed long ago" - there is something about what we are taught as children that will never quite leave us, and sometimes...will help us find our way back home.

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  18. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJanuary 30, 2015 at 5:44 PM

    Beaitifully said.

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  19. kaykualaJanuary 30, 2015 at 8:09 PM

    To prostrate to Providence's strength and protection is always expected of us. Thoughtful take Marge!

    Hank

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  20. HannahJanuary 30, 2015 at 8:34 PM

    Yes...this resonates with me...what a beautiful seed to use for this sentiment...the fragrant lavender seed...it can't be forgotten. ♥

    Thank you, for joining, Margaret!

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  21. LolamouseJanuary 30, 2015 at 8:36 PM

    This is like a beautiful prayer. Just lovely!

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  22. JimJanuary 30, 2015 at 10:33 PM

    Nice Cinquain pair, Margaret. "Train up the child ..."
    Or, "Teach your children well, your father's hell ..." (Crosby, Stills & Nash song [http://www.lyricsfreak.com/c/crosby+stills+nash/teach+your+children_20312731.html]) is one I like even better.
    ..

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  23. GraceJanuary 31, 2015 at 1:41 PM

    I love the expanded cinquains specially the morning filled with devotions and seeds taking root ~

    Happy Sunday ~

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  24. Kerry O'ConnorJanuary 31, 2015 at 1:47 PM

    There is something about lavender which connects us to the past.

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  25. Jennifer WagnerJanuary 31, 2015 at 3:50 PM

    Lovely. I, too, like the faith connection felt in this.

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  26. Susie ClevengerJanuary 31, 2015 at 5:27 PM

    A beautiful place of prayer, remembrance.

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  27. MarianJanuary 31, 2015 at 7:26 PM

    Pretty, Margaret.

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  28. AnonymousJanuary 31, 2015 at 8:20 PM

    Beautiful sentiment in "children's seeds taking root".

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  29. LydiaFebruary 1, 2015 at 1:11 AM

    Margaret! This is truly wonderful! How impressive that you wrote for more than one prompt, thus, I was not thinking of any of them--only your words and the feelings they evoked in me. Special.

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  30. hyperCRYPTICalFebruary 2, 2015 at 7:03 PM

    Beautiful, just beautiful.
    Anna :o]

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