Tuesday, January 27, 2015

"Five"


Five

Dandelion chains and lavender twists;
innocence in braided curls.
Lacy dresses and sugary smiles

capture not a glance

from bedlam boys still sporting
puppy-dog tails and spit-smoothed hair.

by Margaret Bednar, January 27, 2015


Yes, little girls grow up far faster than little boys…

This is for "Imaginary Garden of Real Toads - The Tuesday Platform"  and 'dVerse - Poetics - Excuse Me, There's a Hair in my Poem!"
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31 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJanuary 27, 2015 at 9:10 PM

    well, all i got is boys...and they are growing up fast enough...my older (12) is going away on a youth retreat this weekend...first weekend away from home and not just at a friends house...

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  2. lynn__January 27, 2015 at 9:21 PM

    Raising the youngest two of my five" bedlam boys" with "spit-smoothed hair"...enjoyed this poem :)

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  3. UnknownJanuary 27, 2015 at 9:34 PM

    they really do... don't have any kids myself, but someone I was friends with for a little while was 12 when I met her and was SO mature. I was 15 and my jaw dropped when she told me her age... geeze, when I was 12 I was still playin hide n seek..

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  4. Glenn ButtkusJanuary 27, 2015 at 10:57 PM

    "thank heaven for little girls, for without them what would little boys do?" sang Maurice Chevalier. Maybe it was my past lives instincts, but even as an adolescent, girls fascinated me; never went through the girls-R-yucky stage. This piece was tight, imaginative, & very effective; rocked the prompt.

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  5. ClaudiaJanuary 27, 2015 at 11:47 PM

    oh i love the spit-smoothed hair.... also like how you weave in the dandelion chains... sigh...they do grow up too quickly

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  6. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2015 at 12:01 AM

    Yes. So true... I still see boys running around like bandits while the girls have suddenly become prim and proper.

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  7. Kathy ReedJanuary 28, 2015 at 1:17 AM

    Spit-smoothed hair is great..the rhythm in this reminds me of 'fair haired maidens'..of another rhyme..

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  8. Katie Mia FrederickJanuary 28, 2015 at 3:19 AM

    To realize beauty early is often the secret to beauty of success later on.. and no wonder boys fall prey to heart attacks much earlier than girls of beauty..:)

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  9. brudbergJanuary 28, 2015 at 3:22 AM

    Such difference in general between the little boys and little girls.. (or are they imitating men and women)... maybe men should have flowery hair too.. :-)

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  10. GraceJanuary 28, 2015 at 6:44 AM

    At that age, the girls and boys look delightfully different, smiles ~ I still recall my little girl wearing dresses, now she is jeans & boy's shirts teen ~

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  11. FireblossomJanuary 28, 2015 at 9:56 AM

    This vividly depicted scene will change soon enough!

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  12. Roslyn RossJanuary 28, 2015 at 10:10 AM

    They do grow up fast. Enjoy. The really hard part comes after about 18 when you can no longer kiss it better or put a bandaid on it.

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  13. Maude LynnJanuary 28, 2015 at 11:03 AM

    Lovely, lovely, Margaret!

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  14. Kerry O'ConnorJanuary 28, 2015 at 1:40 PM

    I see the essence of girlhood in these lines.

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  15. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2015 at 1:52 PM

    This is a delight. Gotta love those little boys, though with their puppy-dog tails. :0)

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  16. Vaccinius ™January 28, 2015 at 2:02 PM

    Those are nice images, you are using. Being green is the thing. :-)

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  17. MaryJanuary 28, 2015 at 2:25 PM

    So true little girls grow up quicker than boys. Oh how I wish they did not & took more time to enjoy the things that only childhood can offer.

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  18. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2015 at 2:33 PM

    This is sweet and in a good way. The frilly girls and the rowdy boys ignoring. How wonderful to look back at childhood.

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  19. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2015 at 2:53 PM

    love the line "innocence in braided curls."

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  20. Yvonne OsborneJanuary 28, 2015 at 7:01 PM

    My little boy still hasn't grown up!

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  21. Yvonne OsborneJanuary 28, 2015 at 7:01 PM

    My little boy still hasn't grown up!

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  22. UnknownJanuary 28, 2015 at 8:02 PM

    Felt the sweetness of childhood and smiled!

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2015/01/27/spectrum/

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  23. SaravJanuary 28, 2015 at 9:41 PM

    Very true. We get to keep the innocence a bit longer with the boys...but once 14 hits, all bets are off... ;-)

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  24. Jennifer WagnerJanuary 28, 2015 at 10:18 PM

    I find this to be delightful!

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  25. Gillena CoxJanuary 29, 2015 at 5:43 AM

    Enjoyed your growing up poem; my daughter and son are grown up both in their forties
    Thanks for dropping in to read mine

    Much love...

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  26. Other MaryJanuary 29, 2015 at 11:00 AM

    I really like this, especially you last two lines.

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  27. Amrit SinhaJanuary 29, 2015 at 2:04 PM

    Beautiful imagery :D

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  28. Optimistic ExistentialistJanuary 29, 2015 at 3:50 PM

    Beautiful literary captures of childhood. Well-done.

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  29. kaykualaJanuary 29, 2015 at 11:19 PM

    Young boys learn early to take orders and it may even last a lifetime. It bodes well for good relations if done sincerely by the lasses! Great lines Marge!

    Hank

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  30. OutlawyerJanuary 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM

    You are absolutely right here--And there are many charming phrases--the hair with the spit to keep it in place was especially evocative to me Thanks k . (Manicddaily)

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  31. JimJanuary 30, 2015 at 7:01 PM

    That was fun, Margaret. I think some of the boys don't ever change. Mrs. Jim trained me so that I will know what she looks like on MOST any day.
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