Suspicion
I followed faith's tradition,
thumb pricked, bled, dripped -
husband's morning coffee flavored,
my love he'd never flee.
Yet from his shirt I plucked
long, golden strand.
Suspicious. Unsure.
Singed and discarded
treacherous silky hair -
sent voodoo spell
her wanton way
only to reap a doubters
grief. He hadn't loved her
so she shot them both.
by Margaret Bednar, August 7, 2013
Maire Laveau is a fascinating read. She was a black woman in New Orleans, LA, and was known as the Queen of Voodoo. Some say she converted to Christianity (Catholicism) before she died. Either way, it is said most of her spells were to help the poor and the needy.
This is for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Words Count with Mama Zen - Voodoo in 73 words or less.
And I changed this up a bit a day later but it is still 55 words so... this is also for Friday Flash 55.
Suspicious. Unsure.
Singed and discarded
treacherous silky hair -
sent voodoo spell
her wanton way
only to reap a doubters
grief. He hadn't loved her
so she shot them both.
by Margaret Bednar, August 7, 2013
Maire Laveau is a fascinating read. She was a black woman in New Orleans, LA, and was known as the Queen of Voodoo. Some say she converted to Christianity (Catholicism) before she died. Either way, it is said most of her spells were to help the poor and the needy.
This is for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Words Count with Mama Zen - Voodoo in 73 words or less.
And I changed this up a bit a day later but it is still 55 words so... this is also for Friday Flash 55.
Woman, be careful of the spells you weave!
ReplyDeleteouch!
ReplyDeleteOh my lord, watch out!
ReplyDeletesuspicion... confirmed. yikes!
ReplyDeleteOr... The spells did work. He was never unfaithful, even though the woman pursued him. Maybe he was just giving her an innocent lift home from work? Be careful, indeed, when casting voodoo!
ReplyDeleteMy, my...you know what to speak to end a problem... :) Love it! Good to have you back!
ReplyDeleteYikes! I think spells work a little fast on insufficient evidence. Cutting. Sharp.
ReplyDeleteI am so enjoying the responses to this prompt. Way cool, Margaret.
ReplyDelete"wished harm her wanton way, and it came" — wow, Margaret. We have to watch what we wish for, don't we?
ReplyDeleteK
That second line is brilliant, and I love the twist at the end.
ReplyDeleteIt's true; Marie was a devout Catholic, famous throughout New Orleans for her generosity and service to the poor.
Imagine thinking it and having it happen. Sort of brings up all kinds of conscience questions but it is the fair ending ;-)
ReplyDeleteFound a long very obviously dyed blonde hair on my husband once--turned out to be his daughter's from a previous marriage, stopping by his jobsite to say hello and hug her dad. Never assume, as they say. I love the fable-like quality of this--read it and weep, ladies.
ReplyDeleteOof! Not quite the ending I envisaged, but I guess there was no saving him.
ReplyDeleteWelcome back Margaret!
ReplyDeleteI love this voodoo tale you've woven...entertaining and well done!
Always good to have a few voodoo spells in your back pocket if needed!
ReplyDeleteHi there!
ReplyDeleteDo do that voodoo that you do to me! ... love your poem, Margaret.
Having read the other version as well, this one worked out just fine. I was certain you were on Holiday Margaret, being incommunicado is sometimes a blessing not to mention relaxing.
ReplyDeleteLoved your Voodoo 55
Thanks for playing
WELCOME BACK SAFELY!!!!!!!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End
well now there is a twist....
ReplyDeleteat least he wont cheat again
and force you to waste your magic once more....smiles.
Well, that's effective. Just great opening lines too Margaret.
ReplyDeletegoodness what a spell and twist ~ a potent post Margaret ~
ReplyDeleteHubbies need to be careful.
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