Wednesday, August 21, 2013

IGWRT's - Out of Standard "Transformed"


Transformed

Lonely, sad, misunderstood,
I stand, silhouetted,
waiting for a glimpse
of your face.

Often I'm wrapped within
wooly shawl, sometimes
shoulders bared
to summer's soft breeze.

By nature I'm impatient,
driven, jealous
of everything, everyone,

but you gentle me.
A pendant about my neck
shimmers your likeness
a yin to my yang -

and I'm transformed.

by Margaret Bednar, August 21, 2013

 This is for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads "Out of Standard" Blue Moon Special - the twist:  the poem must NOT contain any concepts of night or sky (or night sky) and replacing with adjectives will be CHEATING and will incur a heavy fine.

Moonstone & Emerald Necklace HERE.

Also for Friday Flash 55 , and dVerse "Getting Tight (in here)
at

56 comments:

  1. Brian MillerAugust 21, 2013 at 11:02 AM

    nice...i like how the totem of them brings you peace as you wait to see their face....there are some nice spiritual allusions in that too...smiles

    hey can i use one of your 55s for an article i am going?

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  2. UnknownAugust 21, 2013 at 11:38 AM

    Beautiful,and quite unique. Loved the interplay and the transformation!

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  3. AnonymousAugust 21, 2013 at 11:47 AM

    Love this! You've certainly risen to the challenge as beautifully as last night's moon.

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  4. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 21, 2013 at 1:03 PM

    Wow, this is a fantastic response to the prompt. It shows me the possibilities. I got stuck on the limitations but you showed me there are none!

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  5. Kerry O'ConnorAugust 21, 2013 at 2:23 PM

    Wow! That moonstone necklace is fabulous (my kind of jewelry), and I love the tranquility which is promised in your words.

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  6. Kay L. DaviesAugust 21, 2013 at 3:12 PM

    Transformed from "lonely, sad, misunderstood" is great; transformed from "impatient, driven, jealous" is fantastic.
    And the moonstone necklace as talisman is perfect.
    K

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  7. AnonymousAugust 21, 2013 at 4:20 PM

    a poignant homage, Margaret

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  8. PeggyAugust 21, 2013 at 7:18 PM

    Wonderful creative way to take the moon prompt! Very nice.

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  9. Lisa GordonAugust 21, 2013 at 7:57 PM

    Your words are always so beautiful, Margaret.
    Thank you for sharing them here!

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  10. HelenAugust 21, 2013 at 8:31 PM

    I melted as I read your poem today .. melted.

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  11. AnonymousAugust 21, 2013 at 11:48 PM

    I so like the words "you gentle me".

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  12. Isadora GruyeAugust 22, 2013 at 12:08 AM

    this reads almost like a lullabye, the flow is easy and a little sad, a little gentle....all stunning! You really embraced this challenge. I too liked the line "you gentle me". well done and viva la

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  13. Susie ClevengerAugust 22, 2013 at 2:06 AM

    Beautiful.."you gentle me" I feel like that also when standing in the moonlight.

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  14. EllaAugust 22, 2013 at 7:04 AM

    I love the lyrical notes of your poem~
    I too love, "you gentle me" :D

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  15. SaravAugust 22, 2013 at 8:17 AM

    Hi Margaret! It really made me smile to see you at my blog, I literally had just been thinking about you yesterday-- "I need to get over and see what Margaret's been up to" :-) Love that necklace, and that word gentled is one of my favorites. Also you succeeded so well with your poem--I actually re-read it because I was sure a night sky word was in it
    :-)

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  16. MarianAugust 22, 2013 at 11:13 AM

    awww. lovely, like an embrace. maybe that wooly shawl makes me feel that way :)

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  17. MaryAugust 22, 2013 at 3:16 PM

    A very beautiful and transformative poem (for dVerse). Love the yin to yang!

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  18. ClaudiaAugust 22, 2013 at 3:16 PM

    everyone seems to write about the moon today...smiles... i like his soothing gaze as well...the most wonderful way to calm me down...

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  19. AnonymousAugust 22, 2013 at 3:44 PM

    That is a lovely transformation of emotions and of nature. Tender and gentle write.

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  20. AnonymousAugust 22, 2013 at 4:10 PM

    oh how I loved this..short writes sometimes really do have so much compact tight emotion, this is a fine example of this style done well.

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  21. brudbergAugust 22, 2013 at 4:18 PM

    What a lovely transformation that only real love can do. I love the cadence in the verse, a gentleness that bring forth the love.

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  22. Kathryn DycheAugust 22, 2013 at 4:20 PM

    I felt myself falling into your words. So beautifully written.

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  23. BeachannyAugust 22, 2013 at 4:23 PM

    Nice tension in the middle - feeling the anxiety, the rise of jealousy and the peace and serenity of the moon in a necklace is a perfect denouement.

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  24. Laurie KolpAugust 22, 2013 at 4:32 PM

    I love this, Margaret... especially:

    Often I'm wrapped within
    wooly shawl, sometimes
    shoulders bared
    to summer's soft breeze

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  25. aka_andreaAugust 22, 2013 at 5:38 PM

    I love the calming effect of the moon~ this is a great write for all of the prompts!

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  26. ScarletAugust 22, 2013 at 5:56 PM

    I like the gentle lilt & transformation by the moon ~ Stunning picture as always Margaret ~

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  27. Ginny BrannanAugust 22, 2013 at 6:06 PM

    This feels more of a love poem to that special someone, and it took me a moment (and a re-read) to piece it together for the "moon!" Beautifully written. Especially like
    "A pendant about my neck
    shimmers your likeness
    a yin to my yang -

    and I'm transformed."

    The yin and yang reference is just lovely. Well done.

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  28. Buddah MoskowitzAugust 22, 2013 at 6:30 PM

    "You gentle me." That's genius! I loved it .

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  29. hedgewitchAugust 22, 2013 at 8:44 PM

    Late for one prompt, but right on time for the other one! ;_) Great job here, Margaret, and that necklace is just stunning. I see why they call it moonstone.

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  30. author.nara.maloneAugust 22, 2013 at 8:45 PM

    Beautiful. Loved the moon as pendant. You set the scene so perfectly that I never realized you hadn't mentioned night until I read your note.

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  31. G-ManAugust 22, 2013 at 9:15 PM

    Margaret Bednar...
    You are the consummate Romantic.
    It's just your naturally beautiful soul shining through.
    Loved your Moonstruck 55
    Thanks for playing, thanks for your wonderful support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  32. HisFireFlyAugust 22, 2013 at 9:29 PM

    calm descends upon me here, thank you!

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  33. JeffAugust 22, 2013 at 9:41 PM

    Beautiful scene here, some very lovely lines. Excellent!

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  34. AnonymousAugust 22, 2013 at 10:20 PM

    I feel connected to the moon ( no I did not write that).. and I felt connected to your words. Ying to my yang - beautiful - well penned- thank you.

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  35. TALONAugust 22, 2013 at 10:26 PM

    There's a softness and whimsy that I really love in this Margaret. And the photo is sublime.

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  36. Kathy ReedAugust 22, 2013 at 11:20 PM

    All the words previously used in comments are saying it all...a marvelous work of art!

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  37. AnonymousAugust 22, 2013 at 11:32 PM

    A gorgeous poem, a lovely read today.

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  38. AnonymousAugust 22, 2013 at 11:50 PM

    There's a melodic voice that brings to mind a wave of forces-- heavenly and earthly yet, it doesn't shake but cradles me... loved every allusion!

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  39. AnonymousAugust 23, 2013 at 3:19 AM

    shimmers your likeness
    a yin to my yang -

    and I'm transformed.


    The balance of the universe and the balance of man and woman.

    Beautiful poem! :)

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  40. SusanAugust 23, 2013 at 5:58 AM

    Some of us do indeed stand before the moon like an altar.

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  41. vb holmesAugust 23, 2013 at 7:06 AM

    Hopefully, his positive influence will permanently dispel her negative self image. Nicely written.

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  42. vb holmesAugust 23, 2013 at 7:06 AM

    Hopefully, his positive influence will permanently dispel her negative self image. Nicely written.

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  43. TCPCAugust 23, 2013 at 7:14 AM

    The soft tones of fears wrapped to sleep. wonderful!

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  44. WolfsrosebudAugust 23, 2013 at 10:30 AM

    so liked the wooly shawl

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  45. LolamouseAugust 23, 2013 at 10:35 AM

    Love the phrase "You gentle me." This was beautiful, and if anyone would like to buy me that necklace, I wouldn't complain!

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  46. Other MaryAugust 23, 2013 at 10:43 AM

    The moon works her special magic on us all. I really like the yin/yang reference. Some beautiful descriptive phrases here too Margaret. And the picture is lovely.

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  47. Mystic_MomAugust 23, 2013 at 10:44 AM

    What they ^ all said, and my own: perfectly lovely 55!

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  48. Myrna R.August 23, 2013 at 12:07 PM

    So beautiful your words and the photo. I love the moon, and it's true, just watching it is tranformative.

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  49. kelvin s.m.August 23, 2013 at 8:35 PM

    ...a real gentle read with a meditative feel... loved the stillness here.... smiles...

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  50. kaykualaAugust 23, 2013 at 10:49 PM

    The moon has that special connection. And rightly with the yin/yang balance the moon exudes a nice feel to mankind, within that peaceful scenario. Nice 55 Marge!

    Hank

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  51. AnonymousAugust 24, 2013 at 5:20 AM

    Beautiful, gentle, peaceful - thanks for a soothing read Margaret.

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  52. AnonymousAugust 24, 2013 at 7:39 AM

    That is all one can look for a gentle yin and yang. Gentle is
    God isn't He...with moonlight.

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  53. AnonymousAugust 24, 2013 at 10:59 AM

    "You gentle me," that use of gentle was a verb... perfect for this, as though your wild streak is tamed by her lovely face. Simple scrumptious, Margaret, and thanks for commenting on my take. Looks like a song is forthcoming... Amy

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  54. Alice AudreyAugust 26, 2013 at 9:38 PM

    Amazing how well you get the night sky across without actually saying it.

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