Iambic Pentameter
Meterical line in traditional verse
da DUM da DUM da DUM,
syllables unstressed, stressed
ictic, non-ictic stuck upon my tongue
drop as blobs upon a paper,
my departure from form
unlike the Bard's.
Mine, soon to be crumpled, tossed;
so much for intonations and pace.
by Margaret Bednar, January 16, 2013
This is for Imaginary Garden with Real Toad's - Words count with Mama Zen: today's challenge: Got a form that slays you... write about it in 75 (generous) words or less. I KNEW exactly what to write about :)
I adore your blobs upon the paper.........
ReplyDeleteShakespeare never had it so good! :)
This is quite funny, Margaret. I'm with you on this matter of form; I find it is too restrictive. I think poetry needs rhythm, but as in jazz, the same old beat—da DUM da DUM da DUM—can be boring.
ReplyDeleteWell, sometimes I'm sure it is because I have so much to learn and my talent is wobbly. :)
DeleteHorses for courses, I suppose. To me it is so easy, like speech. In fact, when writing a poem I have to make sure that I am not using it.
ReplyDeleteChaucer is to blame: having had to work my way through most of his work, the iambic pentameter became second nature.
I LOVE this and totally relate to it! Forms make my mind glaze over. Though I do feel pleased as Punch when occasionally I manage one:)
ReplyDeleteHa. I know. Some of my favorite are pure form.
DeleteWhew, what a relief! After so many anti-free verse poems this is a drink of fresh water. I adore iambic pentameter, but I also enjoy how you diss it and miss it!
ReplyDeleteYou're a delight.
ReplyDeleteI have been thinking about you and your family.
Thank you. Truly.
DeleteI love a good bit of form poetry. I think in form and rhyme, so you've offered a glimpse at a totally different viewpoint.
ReplyDeleteGreat form on your non-form storm!
ReplyDeletethis is hilarious and i find it so real and true! i like writing in many forms, but the i.p. reduces me to swill very quickly. love it!
ReplyDeleteI'm right there with you my poetic friend!! Well done!
ReplyDeleteMargaret, I especially like the second stanza....almost a tongue twister! Sometimes a person just has to laugh!
ReplyDeleteYou have managed the form well with words that say you cannot do it..love it!
ReplyDeleteI like what your wrote but I would be unable to read it aloud… could you translate it into French?
ReplyDeleteFrench is by far the most beautiful language. I could listen to it forever. My daughter took Frenxmch for two years and I love when she rattles off a few basic sentences. I also named one of my daughters " Jeanette Marie". I believe that is quite French. :).
DeleteVagabonde: How is this?
ReplyDeletePentameter iambic
Meterical ligne dans le verset traditionnelle
da da da DUM DUM DUM,
syllabes inaccentuées, a souligné
ictique, non ictique collé sur ma langue
tomber comme des gouttes sur un papier,
mon départ de la forme
contrairement à celui de Bard.
Mine, qui sera bientôt froissé, jeté;
tant pour les intonations et le rythme.
Haha! This is loads of fun, Margaret. I guess the iambic meter is something you can 'hear' or not.
ReplyDeleteI love that photo too!
Perfectly (funny)!!
ReplyDeleteOh, that struggle...yeah, this is mine too..I also love the photo and your take on this prompt :D
ReplyDeleteI'm with you, sister!
ReplyDeleteAmen to this ~ I never understood Da-DUM and frankly it stresses me out ~
ReplyDeleteI hope you are feeling better ~ I will start writing for our In Tandem post but if you want to start, please feel free to do so ~
Grace - I prefer to follow your lead. :)
ReplyDeleteLaughing, Margaret. You ended up with a pretty strong meter in this, even if you didn't mean to--it's insidious! I used to find it almost impossible to even recognize stuff like iambic pentameter, let alone write in it, but the more I play around with it the more it creeps in, even in my free verse sometimes. Hope you and your family are feeling better.
ReplyDeletehahaha....i am learning to like form somewhat...meter is not my strong point...i like letting the verse find its own rhythm...
ReplyDeleteForm works for me, I'm a song writer. Ha
ReplyDeleteLOVE this, Margaret! i feel exactly the same way about meter!
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HA! That's fun. :)
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