Sunday, December 2, 2012

The Mag #146, "Smitten"

"Object to be Destroyed" by Man Ray

Smitten

I appear
the consummate player,

never letting on
I'm counting

the seconds, minutes,
hours, since you left,

our tempo still sweet
upon my tongue.

I remain silent, as this
would render me pathetic.

by Margaret Bednar,  12-02-2012

For The Mag #146.
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22 comments:

  1. FireblossomDecember 2, 2012 at 12:35 PM

    Ha! Get outta my head.

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  2. Amrit SinhaDecember 2, 2012 at 12:49 PM

    It's amazing ... loved the words in this piece !!!

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  3. AnonymousDecember 2, 2012 at 9:18 PM

    Honey, you can't keep time if you DON'T count... ;-)

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  4. Arian TejanoDecember 2, 2012 at 11:30 PM

    Ah, I love this.

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  5. Ginny BrannanDecember 3, 2012 at 1:05 AM

    Aw, to be smitten like this! Lovely words, Margaret.

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  6. DaydreamerDecember 3, 2012 at 5:44 AM

    Smitten.... such a nice, agnonising word.
    Lovely.

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  7. Rinkly RimesDecember 3, 2012 at 6:59 AM

    You captured the beat of the beat.

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  8. JBinford-BellDecember 3, 2012 at 7:43 AM

    Nice rhythm.

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  9. Laurie KolpDecember 3, 2012 at 7:47 AM

    Aww... how sweet. Reminds me of first loves.

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  10. Ginnie HartDecember 3, 2012 at 12:36 PM

    Ah yes. The beat of THAT drummer!

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  11. HelenDecember 3, 2012 at 12:51 PM

    LOVE the December header!!

    When that 'tempo' goes off beat, pathetic is usually the resulting emotion! (at least for me)

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  12. Tess KincaidDecember 3, 2012 at 2:05 PM

    Pathetically in love...

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  13. LLM CallingDecember 3, 2012 at 3:40 PM

    Keep counting those beats

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  14. LynDecember 3, 2012 at 4:50 PM

    You did this so well, the secret yearning, the movement of time..

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  15. RMPDecember 3, 2012 at 6:33 PM

    a very succulent tempo it must be. while silence seems like a just route, I wonder if not speaking up is more pathetic.

    you really transformed this image well.

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  16. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerDecember 3, 2012 at 9:38 PM

    our tempo still sweet upon my tongue--


    I love that line!

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  17. Misfit.December 3, 2012 at 9:57 PM

    Oh my goodness!!! I absolutely loved this! That line is indeed a killer. I love your analogy. Thanks!

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  18. kaykualaDecember 3, 2012 at 11:51 PM

    There are some things which we just got to accept, pathetic but true! Nicely Marge!

    Hank

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  19. BerowneDecember 4, 2012 at 8:13 AM

    Nice writing, and rather moving...

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  20. Doctor FTSEDecember 4, 2012 at 9:09 AM

    An inventive interpretation of the prompt.

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  21. JinksyDecember 4, 2012 at 3:03 PM

    I hear the rhythm of life... :)

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  22. Brian MillerDecember 6, 2012 at 10:02 PM

    our tempo still sweet on my tongue...well that is a pretty hot line...smiles...actually i really like this one...just something charming to it...

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