Thursday, October 11, 2012

Magpie Tales #138, IGWRT's Wednesday Challenge, Friday Flash 55 "So,The Maiden says"


So, the Maiden says...

"He ravaged me sir!  I was
bathing in the pond,
stepped out to dry.  I had
no "designs", sir!  No knowledge
he would spy my private sanctuary.

Yes, his eyes ravaged me!  Left
me breathless, quivering, I fainted.

I remember nothing...

I'm sure you are wise, Father. He must 
marry me, for I've been violated."


by Margaret Bednar, October 11, 2012

This is for Magpie Tales #138 and IGWRT's "Kerry's Wednesday Challenge" - an unreliable story teller (credibility questionable) and Friday Flash 55.


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24 comments:

  1. Kerry O'ConnorOctober 11, 2012 at 11:35 AM

    How clever of you to combine these challenges. In retrospect, this picture seems perfect for an unreliable narrator and you told her version of events very well. Reminds me of all those Greek maidens who claimed that Zeus impregnated them.

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyOctober 11, 2012 at 11:39 AM

    Oh such a clever mix of two prompts. Of all the responses to the photo, yours seems the most plausible to me.....well done.

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  3. DaydreamertooOctober 11, 2012 at 1:08 PM

    Minx! ;) Clever you :

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  4. AnonymousOctober 11, 2012 at 1:27 PM

    Very charming - the feint/faint especially funny I thought in the context of her alarm!

    Thanks also, Margaret, for your thoughtful comment. k.

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  5. Amrit SinhaOctober 11, 2012 at 2:57 PM

    This was quite cleverly done ... love the way you rose to the challenge !!!

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  6. hyperCRYPTICalOctober 11, 2012 at 3:51 PM

    Cleverly done - and he must marry her!

    Anna :o]

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  7. izzyOctober 11, 2012 at 4:37 PM

    Breathless indeed! I think you captured the scene-

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  8. Sabio LantzOctober 11, 2012 at 6:53 PM

    Ooh, that was politically incorrect. You made the woman falsely report being ravaged just so she could marry. How brave of you. And is that a priest (Father) or her Daddy? very risky. Fun read.

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  9. my heart's love songsOctober 11, 2012 at 7:10 PM

    wonderful response to the photograph and an unreliable narrator!

    really enjoyed this, Margaret!
    ♥

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  10. MargaretOctober 11, 2012 at 7:14 PM

    Sabio - I meant her "dad", but it is an interesting angle to consider... lying during confession.

    I have a feeling many women (back in the day) willingly "compromised" themselves by being unchaperoned, coming in after dark, etc., just so a young man would have to offer his hand in marriage...

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  11. G-ManOctober 11, 2012 at 9:02 PM

    Some people do indeed have eyes that penetrate....
    Thanks for the double-header.
    Loved your Compromising 55 Margaret
    As always...Fricking STELLAR!!!!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Ki9ck Ass Week-End

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  12. AnonymousOctober 11, 2012 at 9:30 PM

    :-D First of all, how wonderful that you were able to combine all of those prompts in one tight package.

    Second, this made me laugh and reminded me of some good old shot gun marriages. What a clever little twit she is.

    ~Imelda

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  13. Other MaryOctober 11, 2012 at 9:32 PM

    I too noticed the Father could be a clergyman or parent. I like the extra layer of meaning this gives. Well done.

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  14. Brian MillerOctober 11, 2012 at 10:12 PM

    entrapment? ha...well if he's seen all the good parts she best get something out of the deal....bathing in public, hmmm...

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  15. Alice AudreyOctober 11, 2012 at 10:14 PM

    Why do I suspect entrapment on her part?

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  16. 21 WitsOctober 12, 2012 at 12:35 AM

    Oh yes, such a clever plot indeed! Nicely done!

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  17. LydiaOctober 12, 2012 at 4:49 AM

    Super take on the prompt (one that absolutely stumped me). I won't get into the whole entrapment vs "legitimate rape" issue! This was just fun.

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  18. HannahOctober 12, 2012 at 8:13 AM

    Oh, yes...this surely happens as well you did well with this...at first I was thinking the worst and by the end I was questioning her story's validity.

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  19. MargaretOctober 12, 2012 at 8:56 AM

    ...but in my writers mind, he never touched her... it was all a "ploy" on her part. Back in the day, even a HINT at scandal rushed couples to the altar.

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  20. hedgewitchOctober 12, 2012 at 11:36 AM

    A hint of scandal, and Pa's trusty shotgun. ;_) I agree with those above who say this perfectly fits the pcture--she looks like she's having the 'vapors' to be interesting, to me, and you added that extra little manipulative fillip that made the story complete.

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  21. HelenOctober 12, 2012 at 12:09 PM

    You transported me back to that century, to that mentality .... so nice!!

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  22. UnknownOctober 13, 2012 at 8:32 AM

    So clever. I really like that you take us to a different era with this prompt where "rape" can be just one look. Those are the "good old days". When girls are told that they can get pregnant by just talking to a man. omg. Excellent 55! Mine is here
    Have you a ROCKING AND BLESSED WEEKEND!!!
    hugs
    shakira

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  23. Yvonne OsborneOctober 14, 2012 at 7:35 AM

    Great job on the 55 prompt. I remember nothing, but I'm sure I was violated!

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  24. Ginnie HartOctober 15, 2012 at 8:38 AM

    Sounds like reasonable wishful thinking to me! :)

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