tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post4428134433473911025..comments2024-01-11T10:08:36.567-05:00Comments on Of Verse, Poesy & Odes : Henna my HeartMargarethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-15909962485283936872015-03-07T12:31:34.648-05:002015-03-07T12:31:34.648-05:00Love the alliteration here (especially love the wo...Love the alliteration here (especially love the word "cantankerously"), but also the surprising depiction of a fox as 'innocent' since that is not typically what one puts together. Also, the imagery that comes to mind with 'henna my heart' is so lovely and so thought-provoking...really very creative. You are on a ROLL, Margaret :-)C.C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16393100446679896378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-40294869020679238072015-03-06T21:02:02.774-05:002015-03-06T21:02:02.774-05:00Feeling these calls of nature, taking it into the ...Feeling these calls of nature, taking it into the blood ...oh yes!Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-45562641109393204372015-03-06T16:34:03.414-05:002015-03-06T16:34:03.414-05:00Gorgeous imagery in those first two couplets. My ...Gorgeous imagery in those first two couplets. My tongue loves the alliteration in the third. And the final closes it out wonderfully.Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-23261573307167135302015-03-05T14:36:16.192-05:002015-03-05T14:36:16.192-05:00My word, this is amazing poetry. The sound is into...My word, this is amazing poetry. The sound is intoxicating throughout, but this is my favorite line: "so I henna my heart with their essence"✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-48002730217586851112015-03-05T13:27:29.543-05:002015-03-05T13:27:29.543-05:00a cute one!!a cute one!!Vandana Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10270400982093787158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-80388504473853032502015-02-27T07:24:14.464-05:002015-02-27T07:24:14.464-05:00I liked it Margaret, after it made a meaning for m...I liked it Margaret, after it made a meaning for me. I know your lines, <br />"<i>so I henna my heart with their essence<br />and follow the lake path home."</i><br />are prime here but I had to get past the word, "henna". It may be a woman's word, I'll ask Mrs. Jim after she is awake. <br />Google Dictionary tells me, 'dye your hair with henna (a brownish red dye)', so,<br />"<i>'Don't worry (get gray haired), be happy', 'look on their bright side', <br />and go home via the scenic path.</i>"<br />Did I get close? Read too much in? At any rate, it gives meaning to me that I can take home.<br />..Jimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-31624777835854223882015-02-25T11:52:29.529-05:002015-02-25T11:52:29.529-05:00Beautiful, Margaret and I love the idea of marking...Beautiful, Margaret and I love the idea of marking the heart with such beautiful delicate reminders of the awe that we encounter...lovely.Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-57406674390133903502015-02-22T21:41:48.135-05:002015-02-22T21:41:48.135-05:00Oooh, I love the enchantment and your ending is ta...Oooh, I love the enchantment and your ending is ta-da magical~Ellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06070952447277684613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-75521764814252990472015-02-22T17:51:45.827-05:002015-02-22T17:51:45.827-05:00well crafted ~well crafted ~grapelinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14929030339206629628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-62380315808971734792015-02-22T17:01:16.628-05:002015-02-22T17:01:16.628-05:00Awesome!
ZQAwesome!<br />ZQZQhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08521836993023109556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-25870865161482737642015-02-22T16:00:54.629-05:002015-02-22T16:00:54.629-05:00i henna my heart with them...love the animals you ...i henna my heart with them...love the animals you chose...some nice aliteration in there as well to give it some movement...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-43915002927462969582015-02-22T14:42:14.608-05:002015-02-22T14:42:14.608-05:00Hmmm, wildness would work but I think I love '...Hmmm, wildness would work but I think I love 'their essence" more because their essence is more than just wildness- innocence, wariness, playfulness, etc.<br /><br />Beautiful poem.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-83192861473082850332015-02-22T13:04:54.349-05:002015-02-22T13:04:54.349-05:00I wonder. Should I replace "with essence"...I wonder. Should I replace "with essence". With "so I henna my heart with wildness and ....Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-20942489792069698542015-02-22T11:55:09.172-05:002015-02-22T11:55:09.172-05:00Wild and pretty.Wild and pretty.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-88614593704969552152015-02-22T11:17:02.910-05:002015-02-22T11:17:02.910-05:00I think it's perfect, Margaret.I think it's perfect, Margaret.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-22974776493095532832015-02-22T08:26:55.115-05:002015-02-22T08:26:55.115-05:00I really like your closing couplet:
so I henna my...I really like your closing couplet:<br /><br />so I henna my heart with their essence<br />and follow the lake path home.Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-35048350638851754482015-02-22T08:06:24.152-05:002015-02-22T08:06:24.152-05:00you put a lot of movement in those few lines... lo...you put a lot of movement in those few lines... lovely scene Wolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-22709424409829583652015-02-22T07:35:00.165-05:002015-02-22T07:35:00.165-05:00I specially love this part:
so I henna my heart w...I specially love this part:<br /><br />so I henna my heart with their essence<br />and follow the lake path home.<br /><br />Good one Margaret ~Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-48468080856357913112015-02-22T06:58:54.400-05:002015-02-22T06:58:54.400-05:00flitting life is so full of soaring and dipping......flitting life is so full of soaring and dipping...could feel life's vibration here...beautifulSumana Royhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17333363799083094084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-36163188947934843632015-02-22T06:26:22.307-05:002015-02-22T06:26:22.307-05:00Ah, yes.. the last two lines hit their mark.Ah, yes.. the last two lines hit their mark.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-37259871511382976082015-02-22T01:52:06.343-05:002015-02-22T01:52:06.343-05:00"Henna my heart" ... loved your choice o..."Henna my heart" ... loved your choice of words :-)Amrit Sinhahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08333443172096537424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-7415297455441671562015-02-22T01:31:08.574-05:002015-02-22T01:31:08.574-05:00I love the way your dream in the first lines softl...I love the way your dream in the first lines softly land in reality with that lines. To me this becomes a poem about our experience with nature.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3074509503476824621.post-37949599629616884502015-02-22T00:51:46.893-05:002015-02-22T00:51:46.893-05:00I like the alliteration! And also the sweetness an...I like the alliteration! And also the sweetness and normality of the last line after the earlier dramas of the natural world.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.com